|Reviews for A Price to Pay|
| ruggler354 9/7/12 . chapter 1
I like the idea of Conway playing hero and rescuing pokemon from bad trainers, it could be a cool idea. The description in this chapter is also very detailed which is excellent, it really makes a clear image in my mind of what's going on.
A few pointers though since you asked-there's a few typos I noticed early on, I think 'help' was meant to be 'yelp' and 'unloveable' was meant to be 'unmoveable'. Correct me if I'm wrong. Also, maybe break up your story a bit by starting a new line every time the speaker switches and by adding a divider when the scene changes, it just makes it easier to read.
Apart from that, keep writing, I'd be interested to hear how Suicune started following Conway in the first place. Good work :)