not bad. Short. Need to give me a glimmer of something in Peter.

wow, I really like this! i mean, you could have added a little more dimension to peter. its just... I was hoping for some thing that would make HIM the good guy. like, him wondering why he was so mean, stuff like that. Good story tho!

Ooooooooooooh! I hate Peter soooo much!

First reader, first reviewer. Awww yeah. XD

Granted I haven't read the book, but this definately sounds like something to look into
Poor Peter...T.T;

You really should post more, you write well, and I can rest easy knowing your grammar is good.