|Reviews for The Next Chapter|
| kevslave 3/5/13 . chapter 7
Okay. Will be waiting.
| justinketch98 2/8/13 . chapter 6
Ok guys sorry I haven't been active for a while. I had some other stuff going on. I'll get back to my regular schedule tomorrow. Promise
| NoCreativity 1/4/13 . chapter 6
Man, that's short. You could have add in more details. I mean, most of the chapter is dialogue.
Hope that Yakunan's plan is not something cliche like 'destroying the world'.
| kevslave 1/2/13 . chapter 6
short but informative
| justinketch98 12/7/12 . chapter 5
Ok guys heads up. I need your opinion on which type of ending i should go for. A magic based one or a technology based one. No this does not mean the story is ending soon but i need your decisions now to develop the story upon either paths. PM me your decisions
| kevslave 12/2/12 . chapter 5
Hmmmm...a new OC. I can live with that.
| NoCreativity 11/14/12 . chapter 4
Onii-san Older brother
Onee-san Older sister
| zed 11/8/12 . chapter 4
i love it but would you think it would be cool if akio was a lightening mage?
| kevslave 11/7/12 . chapter 4
Well, it's good, but in my opinion, you should further elaborate some stuff because everything was just too fast. The speed of the second and first chapter was just perfect.
| Shadrala 11/6/12 . chapter 4
Not really trying to be harsh or anything... but your story would be much much more interesting if this main character- Akio was not such a Gary Sue (male version of Mary Sue). He's good at everything, passes the Judgement training (that normally takes 4 months) within a day? Ok, that's a bit too much. Character's weaknesses and their struggles are usually what makes a story interesting and makes me want to continue reading, largely because I want to know how they overcome the problems they have. This is becoming way too predictable- Akio is good at everything and that's boring. Maybe explore your character conception more; if they are human they SHOULD be human, this species usually breathe flaws and mistakes, just incase you didn't know.
| kevslave 10/20/12 . chapter 3
It's a good chapter. I really miss Touma beccause I can't see him the new ones. But story anyways. Hope to see the 4th soon.
| NoCreativity 10/19/12 . chapter 3
So who is the older twin? I'm confused since Akio called Mikoto onee-san and she called him onii-san.
Also, I believe it's Konori, not Komoe. Komoe is the short pink-haired girl who is a teacher at Touma's school.
And yes, I'm still keeping my eyes on Akio.
| Justinket98 10/13/12 . chapter 1
Ok guys i may be a little late with the next chapter. I've got a ton of work piling up so there may be a delay. Sorry about that
| Justinketch98 10/11/12 . chapter 1
Ok guys sorry the next chapter hasn't been up yet. I've just been busy lately but it'll come up soon. Don't worry
| NoCreativity 10/4/12 . chapter 2
Hmm... Things start to get serious now. I believe Akio's flaw will related to his past if I'm not wrong.