|Reviews for Swords of Change|
| crosswire 1/31/13 . chapter 1
Really Like what you've gotten done so far. There are a couple miss spellings here and there, but other then that keep up the good work! I really hope to see more from you.
| Anon 11/29/12 . chapter 2
Really? Graham Aker? I don't agree with implanting characters from other universe's...but it's your story. Angelo Sauper is 19 in the Unicorn OVA which take place in UC0096, so in this he should be 17.
Char is pretty OOC. Your Char is too cocky. He's more humble about his accomplishments and abilities.
You introduced A LOT of characters and made matters worse with nicknames. I think you could have introduced half of what you did initially and introduce the rest later. And with so many characters, all of your descriptions don't stick around, in my head anyway. I had to reread those sections a few times.
From your given premise, I don't understand why you have so many OCs. I think you might end up with a lot of subplots this way. From the way its set up at this point, I see that your three core characters are going to be Char, Amuro and Hathaway - which in itself is unique on the balancing is going to be. Hathaway originally defects from the Federation after the events of CCA because of the corruption. But I don't see you having all three on the same side. Nor do I see you having Amuro act super OOC and stick with the Federation anyway (though it would be a good foil to your OOC Char).
I look foreward to reading more. I think pilot-wise you should only have 1-2 OCs. So we don't get so confused reading this. And i think you should cut Graham out, even though I like him as a character, he isn't UC.
I sound really critical right now, but I DO like your story. I'm interested in what Amuro will pilot, 'cause I see Hathway as the Unicorn pilot caught in the middle of the war. Though maybe Amuro will have Unicorn and Hathaway will have Banshee but the roles of the two machines be reversed.
Can't wait to read more!
| Anon 11/28/12 . chapter 1
Hey this is really cool. One thing I would say is to look over your draft to catch the grammar mistakes you've made and that your in-text author's notes are distracting and pull the reader out of the moment. Same goes for when you insert the music from CCA. But beside all that, I really like your story.
| A Char fan 11/9/12 . chapter 2
i don't usually review, but i'm eagerly awaiting more of this story, there isn't nearly enough Char on this site
| Deathwatch Razgriz 11/10/12 . chapter 2
And so, the curtain rises...
| J. Hellscythe 11/8/12 . chapter 2
HOLY SH*T, HOLY SH*T, HOLY SH*T, HOLY SH*T, I'M FREAKING LOVING THIS SH*T
when is amuro going to return and what kind of Gundam will he pilot, is it going to be NU Gundam until he gets a new upgraded one?! IS IT, IS IT, IS IT, IS IT?! I'M DYING TO KNOW HERE!
| J. Hellscythe 11/8/12 . chapter 1
GOD KNOWS I LOVE GUNDAM AND THIS IS TOP QUALITY GOLD
| Dark Phoenix Jake 11/4/12 . chapter 1
That was one F-ing EPIC Speech. Nice job writing that
| Many Faced Mage 10/10/12 . chapter 2
And the Face of Today is? Greek Gundam Pilot! I don't know what to think right now. Your story sounds interesting. Maybe I'll watch to see how it goes. Also I wonder how Hathaway is going to react to Char and the others? I hop he finds away to deal with his pain.
| overlordmichael165 10/9/12 . chapter 2
Another good chapter well done Jordan yay
| Patriot-112 10/8/12 . chapter 2
Another well done chapter!
| Guest 10/6/12 . chapter 1
Great chapter also once they get amuro back it would be awesome if got the unicorn and gets paired with sayla
| Patriot-112 9/27/12 . chapter 1
And first chapter done!
| overlordmichael165 9/27/12 . chapter 1
| Takeshi Yamato 9/27/12 . chapter 1
A new story. :)
I like the concept, and look forward to Char kicking butt once again. And he has a kid now! :D
Any chance we can add my OC Takeshi into this story as a member of Nasha and Zar's group? We'll probably need to work out a few details regarding where he comes from and what his MS is, but I definitely want to get Takeshi into this story. :)
I look forward to your reply, and hope that it and the next chapter come soon. :)
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