We'll, i'll admit that i was surprised multiple times this chapter, which, i shall make clear is NOT a bad thing!

I had no idea that you'd be bringing in Amiti, for some reason i didn't expect it, not sure why, just didn't. It was very well written, and interesting. I feel like you dropped clues as to who the serial killer is in this first chapter. My current thinking is that it must be someone in Amiti's inner court, otherwise the man who was oblivious to the murders wouldn't have been killed. Also, isn't that a contradiction? you said the upper class weren't hurt, but then the Adviser was killed, wouldn't he be considered upperclass? Anyway, the segment was well written, and i look forward to how you connect Ayuthay's story with everyone elses.

Now, with the Karis-Matthew scenes. Once again, unexpected, but interesting. The way you've written Matthew up to this point made it seem like he didn't like Karis romantically, so the reveal that he kinda did was surprising. Second, maybe its just me, but Karis felt a little out of character in that segment. I mean, one moment she's shy about her feelings, pondering whether or not Matthew even likes her, but then she kisses him spontaneously. To me it didn't flow with the character as you've written her so far. Also the second segment with Karis and Matthew seemed to not have much purpose in being there. They kissed again, but it didn't appear to change Matthew's mind.

Third, with Sveta's seen at the end. Nothing really bad there. My only questioning thing, is that i thought you said Vande was king during the last chapter. Perhaps i misinterpreted it, just letting you know.

Fourth, Thanks for the line about Tyrell. It's always great to see author's account for readers views. (don't do it too much though, well you probably know that lol) I'm curious who you'll pit Karis with. Since this this is a Spirit Shipping fic i assume Matt and Sveta will end up together, so i'm gonna go ahead and guess you'll put her with Amiti.

Fifth, once again a question, are you going to add more PoV characters, or just add more in general? Such as, will Tyrell be joining the ensemble? Just curious, i figure you can't answer too much.

Endnotes: Thanks for writing! This was good, just had a couple of questionable moments. Note that i'm not trying to be rude or mean or anything at all! and i apologize if you saw it that way. Just letting you know my thoughts! Thanks again for writing!

Ñeh. I like a lot both KarisxMatthew and SvetaxMatthew.
Though, as a friend taught me, KarisxSveta ftw!
Kidding. Though they look very cute together...
Jenna... fell from the sky in a cannonball? Nice way of travelling. ...Or maybe not.
Hm. What with Sveta's hypersexuality? I know she's a teenager, and a beastwoman, after all, but... *spaces out* I have an incredibly overactive imagination. Anyway.
Matthew's reaction to Karis' first kiss makes me laugh. Someone hasn't heard of tongue action, apparently.
Yeah, I kinda have to go now.
See ya.

Finally found time to review this! I've read it multiple times now but only just had the chance to sit down and think about what I liked/disliked. (Don't worry, it's mostly the former!)

You're still great at writing atmosphere. I didn't realize how you were doing it at first, but now I notice the flavor-text that each scene is peppered with, immersing readers in the situation with simple details like the attitudes of passerby or visual descriptions of the surroundings. Overdone, this can turn into Jordan-esque scenery porn but I think you've hit the sweet spot with it.

I also like Sveta's perspective in general. She's obviously confused about what she wants and what she needs to do, but it never turns to angst. It offers nice sprinkles of comedy in what's already turning out to be a very dark story, but it remains solid characterization. I'm wondering if there's something going on with her beyond separation anxiety, too - everyone else in the city is acting suspiciously, and Sveta herself is being... Hormonal. I can't tell if that's character or plot development, but I'm pretty sure it's one of those.

Your Ivan is very different from just about every other Ivan I've seen. Looking forward to seeing how he develops.

I do have a few criticisms (mostly fine-tuning suggestions) but they're very minor, and I don't want to spoil the tone of the review with them; I'll PM you later. For now, let it be known to everybody curious that this is definitely a story worth reading, and it's gearing up very fast! Gonna be a fun ride.

Dear goodness. I LOVED this chapter. There were a couple of formatting issues. And Eoleo's thought thingy was a bit hard to read (i think that was intended) But other than that, this chapter was UTTERLY amazing! One of the best chapters of any story that i've read in a long time. Just great job! And, i look forward to more pairings. Also, perhaps i missed something, but where is Tyrell in all this?

Finally, the way you wrote Karis was really great, and makes me want to read a Karis-Matthew romance story from you.

Please Keep this up, it's fantastic!

Yeah, Tuaparang are sticking their fingers into everyones pies (I hope I didn't butcher that saying). I don't know why but I half-expected Sveta to be arrested upon arrival but I guess Heath had to converse with the Tuaparang before making a move. It's not easy besting an adept.

Isaac and Garet are missing, Ivan went to help Eoleo presumly against the Tuaparang and Matthew and Karis are heading out to meet them (all the while Karis is trying to come on to Matthew). Yeah, I can see alot of tensions and problems arising.

Now, did the servants only acting against Sveta because they were ordered to or are they activly supporting this "coup"? Well, I guess it'll get clearer as the story progresses.

See you next chapter.

Oh i was just teasing, since most reboots these days go darker rather than lighter. I didn't mean anything by it :)

Good chapter by the way. i'm really liking this story, and i'm very glad it'll be staying T. So, are there going to be pairings other than Matt-Sveta? Just curious... :)

Keep it Up!

Nice to hear from you again

I'm looking forward to how you will develop this fic even if it gets as dark as "Risen". People always talk about the privileges of royality but never about the duties and limitations such a position holds.

You've created quite the political situation. After the Grave Eclipse every nation will have to rebuild but some will have profited from it. King Wo sems to have allied himself with the Tuaparang. I see a lot of trouble heading toward Morgal, what with both Bilibin and Sana probably viewing for their land since Morgal took the brunt of the Grave Eclipse.

In the first section there were one or two sentences where you wrote "I" instead of "Matthew" or "he". Only "mistake" I spotted.

See you next chapter.

Quite the action-packed first chapter. I remember the two sections from Fallen, but I like the new stuff even more. I think you've picked up a few tricks in the last year and a half, though I could just be seeing what I want to see; regardless, this is all really high-quality stuff, and you've gotten off to a great start.

What surprises me is that it's T-rated. Obviously there's nothing significantly M about it yet (aside from a few, shall we say, "implications"), but are you planning to keep this one more low-key than Risen was? Or is it possible that you'll change the rating later on as the content becomes more mature?

Anyway, great job so far, highly recommended. Watching this one carefully.

So, since this a reboot does that mean you're going to go all dark and gritty? cause you'll be hardpressed to go darker than Risen haha. Great work as always. I find it curious that both Hydros and Kraden recognized their assailants. Hmm, this sounds good. I look forward to more, keep it up!