I really like your fic. so far! I especially like the Ingrid/Bertrand dynamic in the past few chapters.

Loving the Ingrid/Bertrand interaction in this- I particularly like how you hint at Ingrid's understanding/softer side and how thoughtless the Chosen One can be in comparison.
Looking forward to seeing where you are going with this : )

xo

Continue!

this was an awsome story i really hope you write more!:)

Completely unexpected twist in the story with Bertrand's past identity and his relationship with Angela. Definitely very intrigued to find out what the slayers have done to her and if Bertrand can build a new relationship with her. It's so tragic! Very well written indeed! xo

That was really good, I was sort of hoping that Bertrand would rip Harry's head off lol. Keep updating I'm hooked. :). Xxxx

What! this story just gets better and better. Please update soon, i thought it was going to be about Bertrand in love? :P. xxxx

i love it, please update, i love reading about Bertrand like that. :). xxx

Just to say that nearly everyone, me included, got nearly exactly the same review on their fic - regardless of characters/plotlines. I really hope that it won't stop you from continuing to write this fic as it's great to read something about Bertrand and an OC and this has amazing potential. xo

I can't believe that you are copying someone else. I will be telling the original author because its not fair you get the credit and after Beth (yeknodelttil) went through something like this professionally how dare you do it to her on this site. She gladly gives permission if she's asked.

I know you'll delete this if it goes I will sign in and repeat it or Beth will.

The mystery just gets deeper and deeper. So intrigued! I really loved how you described Angela in Bertrand's eyes. It built up such a lovely picture of her in my mind. xo

Love it! Don't worry that you feel as though you're rushing into it, it's a new story and the more you develop it, the easier you'll find it to add in more detail. Don't stop!

It's going great so far. Definitely a very interesting plot device - the mystery about Bertrand's past and the current situation with the Guild.
I think that the past two chapter have changed the tone slightly because they are longer and introducing more of the plot. Some more description would be perfect - you already have a lovely writing style so it would be nice to fill out a bit more of the gaps and show us your grasp of imagery and detail. I hope this is helpful.
xo

Awesome!

Completely intrigued! We know almost nothing about Bertrand and you have nearly four hundred years to play with. Lovely writing again. Look forward to more xo