|Reviews for The Lost Queen|
| CrashkiddX 3/2/13 . chapter 10
So i mean like no rush take you time but if you could maybe post a new chapter... or update at all. i would be immensely happy because Im diggin this story
| EvilPurpleCookiePenkeyMonguin 1/2/13 . chapter 6
This is really good. I love how you've incorporated Lord of the Rings.
| HufflepuffFinder98 11/18/12 . chapter 10
I'm going to be blunt: Aurelia is what's known as a Mary-Sue. Mary-Sue's are characters who carry at least one of the following traits.
*Have non-normal names (when was the last time you met someone named Aurelia?)
*Have a nickname (Aurelia is also known as Lia)
*Describe the character in question's physical apearence in great detail and/or often ("Big blue eyes" or "Dishwater blonde hair")
*Is crucial to the plot (Aurelia is the first to be mentioned in the story)
*Is different than everyone else (Aurelia claims to be neither "Greaser" or "Preppy", although her clothes would've likely gotten her into trouble, as it was taboo for women to wear jeans at the time. This would mark her as a Greaser)
*Chararcters are attracted to the Mary-Sue for no reason (examples including Mutt and the jock at the start of the story)
The biggest indication of a Mary-Sue is having no flaws. In this story, Aurelia is perfect, and that's just not realistic. Give her some flaws, (such as making her a bit less inteligent, make her cranky at times, make her sidetracked by simple things, etc)
Remember, I am trying to help you improve as a writer and not just be cruel (I think you have talent that can be develped farther) and this review is helpful critisim. I hope you find this review helpful.
| LilweenGalatrass 11/5/12 . chapter 10
It's amazing ! The story is great well done ! :O
It really looks like an Indiana Jones' film ! :D
| lotsofbrolly 11/5/12 . chapter 10
Great chapter! The Philosopher's Stone! Great idea! Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep 'em coming! :-D
| lotsofbrolly 11/2/12 . chapter 9
Love your story! Can't wait for the next update! :-D
| LilweenGalatrass 11/2/12 . chapter 9
I'm glad it made you laugh ! :D
But seriously, you must stop to make this kind of suspense, my heart won't support it !
Please ! Hurry up and add the next chapter ! "
| LilweenGalatrass 10/22/12 . chapter 8
The two reviews from the person who said she couldn't be able to sleep well was me in fact ! XD
So, I repeat it : I want the next chapter ! X)
Especially for Mutt and Aurelia ! 3
| Guest 10/22/12 . chapter 8
I really didn't sleep well, you know .. O.O
I can't wait anymore for the next ! XD
| ILoveReadingAndWriting 10/21/12 . chapter 8
Haha! This is brilliance! I wonder what Aurelia and Mutt will do now? How will they get to Sala and the Jones'? Hmm... What I'm even more curious about is what those three will do inside the tomb... I wonder what they'll find
Can't wait for another awesome update!
Your loyal fan,
| Guest 10/21/12 . chapter 8
OK.I want in emergency the next chapter !
Or I won't be able to sleep tonight ! "
| little-red-wolf-5793 10/14/12 . chapter 7
Love this story! Can't wait for the next chapter xD
| Attracted2Insanity 10/8/12 . chapter 7
Loved the mummy reference. Lol.
| LilweenGalatrass 10/8/12 . chapter 7
You're welcome ! You derserve it ! :D
And I read the little thing about Amenophus, I IMMEDIATLY thought to the Mummy and laughed like a crazy ! XD
Can't wait to read next ! ;)
| LilweenGalatrass 10/5/12 . chapter 6
You're welcome for my reviews, and now you've got a brand-new one ! XD
I can't wait to read the next ! ;)