Shawshank sounds like a dick

*whistling a cherry tune, on my way to do some chores like a sir, when suddenly my iPod dings. Sees that you updated and slowly walks backwards to my chair*

Eeyup. I love this thing so much. Poor Allen, that shite must be killing his poor innocent wittle head! Shawshank? Like the movie? And he's Irish? Wooooah, duuuuude! Dude, wooooah!

*grabs another brick*

You're pushin' my buttons, man!

Poor Hannah. I couldn't imagine myself doing what she did. AND THEN FINDING OUT IT'S ALIVE? Dude...no.

Love your writing, and can't wait for Allen n' Grayson (and that 3rd guy) to come back.

-Ghost

Well...that was quite horrifying and morbid. I love it yet at the same time disturbed by it. Keep updating!

*Surprised look* Well...Damn. Go on, mate! Get some!

I like how you portrayed my guy. Especially his little thinking moment about the two sisters.

Speaking of which, *throws a brick at you* WHAT THE SHIT, MAN!?

Lol, rant over. Update soon, buddy. Also, are you going back and forth between characters?

Beautiful, as always. 3

Wow...this did seem a little intense. Read all the way up to chapter 4, and I gotta say, I'm lovin' it. If you want to use him, here's a character.

Name: Rubyn Vinson Kent (Likes to be called Ricky)

Age: Twenty-five

Gender: Male

Height: 5'9

Build: Lanky

Ethnicity: British African-American

Hair-style & Color: Shaved, with a few scars. Black.

Facial Hair: Some stubble.

Eye Color: Dark Brown

Clothes: Black Sonoma Life & Style Hooded Military Jacket, black jeans (left leg has a bandage after being shot, so he'd have a limp) and black boots. Also has a shirt underneath his jacket that says 'If you can read this, then your too close. Back off.'

Jewelry or Extra Items: Black cap, goggles that are on top of the hat, a red plaid scarf, and black elbow and knee pads.

Secondary Weapon (also counts as Melee Weapon): His wrench.

Primary Weapon (can also count as a Melee Weapon): AS VAL / VSS

Strengths: He's an engineer, so he knows his way around mechanics.

Fear(s): Arachniphobia (fear of spiders) and planes. He will literally fight you if you try to force him on a plane.

Personality: Rambler and optimistic.

Previous Occupation: Basic Engineer

Background (Life before everything went to shit): This is the one thing he likes to keep to himself, but after a certain amount of time, he will open up about it. (PM me if you REALLY want to know.)

Like I said, this story looks cool, and I didn't see anything in further chapters saying I couldn't submit anymore. (Do I sound pushy? Sorry If i do.) So, yeah. Cya.

Alright, good. I'll be looking forward to future chapters of this story.

Nice chapter.

Getting much more interesting.

Interesting, please write more.

Nice job on the story so far and nice move partnering Joey with someone like Melissa.

nice one man
and I hope ya feel better
being sick and writing sucks

Stunning, as usual. You wrote Zaira very well, so don't stress too much about her being out of character. You did a great job with her. Hope to see more soon!

didnt log. in . do my character next plz!