|Reviews for Harry Potter: Wizard In New York|
| Thunder Stag 3/22/13 . chapter 1
Is it really that hard to find a beta or somebody good with words, so that they can help you find the stuff and make this a really good story? I mean, this is already a great idea, but with only a bit of work, and perhaps a beta, this could be excellent.
| Andromeda loves Harry Potter 3/13/13 . chapter 13
I want to adopt the story. I am an expert on PJO an HP so I could really help the story progress!
| cinnominbubble 3/11/13 . chapter 13
| cinnominbubble 3/11/13 . chapter 10
Yes Ron got a watch for his b-day...
| fantasybookworm2012 1/4/13 . chapter 9
What makes you think Harry and aHermione should be together? I have nothin against it I just like seeing exactly how others view things.
| fantasybookworm2012 1/4/13 . chapter 8
Kronos is spelled with a k and Hermione doesn't. Fly a broom.
| Lost Daughter of Poseidon 1/4/13 . chapter 13
NOOOOOOO! I LOVE THIS STORY ! You cant put it in hiatus! And if it is up for adoption I would love to take it :) But pleaseeee if you can then continue!
Lost Daughter of Poseidon
| Midnight-Dawn-Morning-Star 1/3/13 . chapter 2
You spelled pilot wrong.
| DarkStars52 1/2/13 . chapter 2
It's Blofis. Not Blowfis. Just thought you might want to know.
| SummerSpirit18 12/14/12 . chapter 3
You sure have explain to do
| SummerSpirit18 12/14/12 . chapter 2
Oh percy you'll use your mind*snieker*
You know that I joke.
| SummerSpirit18 12/14/12 . chapter 1
| Angelia White 12/4/12 . chapter 5
The story was very choppy. The sentences cut off too soon and have little description.
Also Necromancy is death magic not the ability to see the future. Also if he were a seer then he would be like Trelawney or Rachel not proper visions. His 'visions' were of the present and from Voldemort's POV. Also 'Charmed Ones' sounds like something from Charmed where the three Halliwell sisters were known as the Charmed Ones with the Power of Three and all.
| Angelia White 12/4/12 . chapter 4
OK there's a few things wrong here.
There are quite a few spelling mistakes mostly minor but enough to be a bit irritating.
Also it's tear in your eyes not in your tear ducts and you can't empty tear ducts. (I cry enough to know they're always full until you stop crying and even then they help keep your eyes moist.)
Don't be afraid to get a Beta Reader to look over your chapters they can really help. One person I've Beta'd barely needs me anymore because they started noticing more of the little mistakes that are so easily over looked.
Even if you don't think you need a Beta it is always good to have one just to be able to say you've had someone check over your chapters.
Just like last time this is just me trying to help.
| Angelia White 12/4/12 . chapter 3
Why is Harry so clueless about muggles?
Has the monster army attacked New York yet?
How does Rachel look like Ginny?
How do the Demigods know about wizards?
Who is the only person who could time travel?
How did Percy see that?
How come it took like 10-20 seconds for Percy to find out Harry was a Wizard?
Just a little bit of advice. Slow it down, draw it out a little before having people find out he's a wizard. Maybe have a monster attack or something and Harry use magic to beat it or Death Eaters attack.
Please don't think I'm attacking your writing like so many do. I am only trying to help.