|Reviews for battle of the mightiest disciples|
| Guest 4/28/13 . chapter 7
You definitely need to add in some training. Please update your story it's AWESOME!
| Guest 3/6/13 . chapter 7
definitely need training especually with Mikumo lol
| Twan the Dragoon 2/23/13 . chapter 7
i love this story so far. there needs to be a training chapter just thinking about kenichi getting training from mikumo makes me laugh
| Guest 2/14/13 . chapter 7
Why not just let the people who voted Kenichi train him and let the others train Sho?
If their both alive afterwards they can change teachers, and if they are still alive they can fight then.
It would have been even better if Sho deserted after meeting Miu, becomes Ryozanpakus disciple and then Kenichi kills him... Honestly, Sho is a pure douchebag character. He's the worst among Yomi personality-wise, appearance-wise (his clothes scream douchebag!) and his one good deed was dying... And not because he saved Miu, but because he died.
Anyways, killing off Sho would be good, not only for the story, but for everyone.
The one problem with him dying is how it effects Hongo.
But there can only be one, so if he learns Yami-tech, he pretty much have to die... So yeah
Training accident next chapter!
| Guest 2/5/13 . chapter 7
Oooh yeah, Yami!Kenichi is awesome!
Hopefully he can beat up the douchebag that is Sho, maybe even cripple him. Maybe transplant hi legs to the more deserving Ryuuto?
| cra0007 2/4/13 . chapter 7
Well it might be good for character development.
| kaithelonechampion 2/4/13 . chapter 7
For the "training" I would just put the conversations and/or the thoughts of the teachers. Also, I know this will sound stupid, but why don't they just let them leave?
| kaithelonechampion 1/19/13 . chapter 6
Hmmm... I see there could be a better use of ponctuation (commas, periods, and the like), a more in-depth description of the training and environment, dialogue that fits more the characters (apachai said quite a lot, and in my opinion, it should have been said even more childishly), last but not least, the "realism" of the story... It feels weird writing that... Anyway, could the Elder actually do that with his Ki in the manga?
| cra0007 12/15/12 . chapter 5
Im glade they finaly made atractive female characters for this anime so thank you for showing me that.
| kaithelonechampion 12/13/12 . chapter 5
The story itself sounds good. Although there are some issues: you do not use enough punctuation (commas at the right place); your ideas are "smudged" together, making it difficult to read without getting confused (like in the author's note at beginning of chapter 2); you should try to use different fonts when you write a time/location change; and finding metaphors and/or comparisons to express thoughts or descriptions would enrich your story. Lastly, there are the ever so present grammar mistakes we all make, my solution would be to use Microsoft Word or Open Office.
Anyway, keep up the good work!
| alostt5 12/11/12 . chapter 4
wow a great story, I hope that you update soon, the story is very good
| Hard-Swan 11/12/12 . chapter 4
Interesting approach, I like how you put in some people is between kenichi and rimi, do I sense a kenichi x rimi pairing or even a kenichi x raichi pairing? My only criticism would be your spelling and grammar usage, spell check is your friend. Other than that, solid story.
Keep it up.
| Guest 11/11/12 . chapter 4
The saving fist is weak, for Kenichi to prosper he needs blood on his hands.
Hope he kills somebody soon!
| Guest 10/30/12 . chapter 3
Wow I was looking for a story just like this and your writing is great for this being your first fanfiction!
| Takai153 10/26/12 . chapter 3
Very interesting idea. Your punctuation needs some work though, and you forget to capitalize letters a lot. It would be nice to see you improve in that as it would make reading much easier.