Warriors names :D Kewl. lolz I like it how Longclaw's just like 'Saberpaw is amazing, HE CAUGHT ONE MOUSE!" that made me laugh :)

this fan fiction is great. Here is my warrior that i made up

name: Duskstorm
gender: tom
rank: warrior
Description: A larde golden tom with long fur and light grey patches. His eyes are a blueish-grey.

this chapter was great. i enjoyed it but got confused when Silverkit said," Can i go to Yellowstone." I thought Silverkit meant the national park, but that's probably just me. also you ended it on a great cliff hanger.

Nu! Tigerpaw D: Palepaw D: Saberpaw D: SO MANY HURT APPRENTICES D: Hawkfrost, so peppy XD Wow that was random. Epik update :D Hope to see more!

Thanks for updating, it was great :D Thanks so much, me 3 Palescar/Palepaw so much X3 but Smokepaw and Tigerpaw does seem like a cute pair ;) Please update again soon, I'd love to see more :D

Im sorry but i laughed at some of the names(Lakepool? HAHA)

I Like it!
What is Smokepaw's warrior name gonna be?

My I submit a cat for your story?
Lilypaw
Same age as Tigerpaw
Tigerpaw 's clan or Smokepaw's
Light peachish colored shecat with a white muzzle sky blue eyes and a
white tailtip and paws
Also in love with Smokepaw if in tigerpaws clan they can both meet him and accidently meet on the same night

This story is great! I love how (tiger)paw trains under (tiger)star.
:(D the ( is my Mustache XD

i love it could i make a dark forest cat? pm me

You need to work on paragraphing

Me luvs it! Thankies for adding in Palepaw! Please check out my stuff and feel free to submit a character of your own there :) MUST READ MORE OF TIGERPAW! (pardon my insanity XD)

May I suggest a cat for the story? If you don't use it it's fine :) Just seeing in Chapter 3 that you have the form and such so I supposed I'd submit one for use.

Name: Palekit(Palescar)

Age: 3 moons (or, if apprentice, 8 moons)

Clan: Same as Tigerkit?

Appearance: Gray tabby tom with darker, almost black stripes and patches of white on his chest and paws. He has amber-green eyes. (Later on gets a really long, pale scar along his left flank, earning him the warrior name of Palescar) pic_grey_

Rank: Kit (Apprentice is good too if you want to have him there instead)

Personality: Quiet and polite. Easily hurt. Prefers to keep to himself. Later on turns a bit bitter and depressed after getting badly scarred and receiving the name Palescar.

Other: Can he maybe have a crush on Tigerkit?

Hope this is good and that you can use the character :) btw, your plot-line so far looks great! I hope to see more of this!

Hey nice job!

It's a little bit confusing, the way you switched from 3rd person to 1st person, but the story is still ally rgood. Have you considered putting an author's note at the Beginning and/or the end of each chapter, and double spacing? That makes it a little bit easier to read.