Ok, good that you updated bad that it took sooo long. I realize you must have been busy, but you need to make time for your story. Also try making the chapters a bit longer.

Super cool. Update soon.

You still have readers! Your grammar has improved, by the way. XD

Well it's not bad. Tailas lack of weapon skill is realistic. But do some more exploring. Poke fun at the plot, play with it a bit. Experience the world, do some heavy searching for the chests, perhaps you could have left one of them on Kains side of the quake. Actually what the hell is Rosa doing in Kaipo? That is never explained. Or the guards. How did they know? Kain and Cecil made no plans to meet them thare, and he was surprised at Rosa. So why? Anyway don't rush, create

Hey hi. Bit of advice, to try to help to prevent cliche. I'm really sorry about this but I hope it helps. Don't be to mad, you see a lot of eletronic portals to other worlds on fan fiction. TVs ,play station, computer, you name it. Secondly after being shot out of the water Chrystal they got from mysidians shouldn't the Barron Red wings be more hostile and suspicious? They just came from the crystal, they might be assassins. Weapon training is not automatically learned, in fact training in weapon use might be a bonding moment for your paring choice. The costume change was also unnesary, costumes are to blend in, which is pointless when you come shooting out of a crystal. Please tell me they have a purpose here besides dating Kain and Edward? Make a diffrence in the plot for a reason. Something beyond the story. Remember that Kain and Edward will be hard to convince to date beacuse they have emotional problems. One has a huge crush long ignored, and the other lost his love. I would sujest rethinking this one. The first chapter is not very interesting. It's not the best idea to start with introduceing your OC, instead start with them in mysidia with a battle raging around, something action packed, let the audiance be lured in with action, and learn your OCs through how maney people do you know who accept that they are in final fantsy raight off the bat. it is a medevill esque world with monsters and magic, alot would think their crazy, except posibly an amnesic. Most write these sort of hints off as flames, please don't be one of them. I like original charecters but the key word is original. Original voice, plot, methods. If done to clichaed it becomes Sue. And honestly thare are to many out thare, giving OCs a bad name. I'm not saying your thare, but please put some more thought into this

Faved the story as promised! I loved the whole "Oh no not a poet!" thing priceless. update soon.

Don't worry about not posting for a while. I really liked the part when Nicky and talia was being fangirly when they saw how cute ceil looked sleeping. Continue :)

Forgot to log in, but whatever. I like how this story is going. Next time I log in I'll fave it. Can't wait for the net chap. Update soon!

Keep up the good work! :)

Keep up the good work still loving the story :)

Great fight scene please continue :)

Luv the story please continue :)

This seems pretty decent, for a self insert. The grammar needs a bit of work, but overall, not bad. Keep working at it! I'll be looking forward to more.

Hey, not sure if my other review made it from my phone. I really love how this is starting out. Please update soon. : )

This shows promising. I would like you to continue.