|Reviews for Numb|
| Shoot4theStars 12/12/12 . chapter 1
Ooooooh, the suspense! XD I love this story, it really captures the feelings after the last episode. Continue? Please?
| MichaelaTheUchiha 10/21/12 . chapter 1
Except it's down now.
BUT THAT'S OKAY, SOMEONE UPLOADED IT ON YOUTUBE.
My heart literally stopped when I saw Tim getting nailed by that staple. Especially since he passed out. I was like, "OHSHITTIMAREYOUOKAY?"
That was such a great episode.
AQUALAD ;; M'GANN ;;
| Reading Nut Cassirole 10/20/12 . chapter 1
O_O ... O_O did u just kill robin... O_O that was deff intense
keep up the good work :)
| babyblue3752 10/18/12 . chapter 1
| Shizuku Tsukishima749 10/14/12 . chapter 1
WHOA... So sad and creepy! Yikes! Poor Nightwing and Robin! Geez! Love it, though! I haven't seen anything since before the hiatus... I need to catch up! XD Rock on! *U*
Oh! Two things, though.
1. Grammatically, when you said 'Barbara and him work quickly,' it should be 'He and Barabara.' This is because if you take out 'him' and read the sentence as ONLY 'Barabara' is doing the action and such, it makes sense; on the other hand, if you take out 'B' and read the sentence as ONLY 'him' doing the action and such, it doesn't make sense. However, if you replaced the 'him' with 'he,' it DOES make sense. Then, you switch the sentence around to 'He and Barbara' because it's grammatically correct: in that you're putting the unnamed individual first, giving him just as much attention as the named person so the unnamee doesn't get pushed into the background...or at least, that's a simple way to look at it. :D
2. This is a dialogue rule that may be helpful. Here's the line: "Just don't die, okay?" He laughed again blood spatting against Nightwing's face, "I suck at being Robin don't I?"
When it gets to the 'against Nightwing's face,' is where the issue comes in. There should only be a comma there if the sentence on either side of the dialogue breaker (what we could call this: "He laughed again blood spatting against Nightwing's face") are continuing into each other. Take these as examples:
"Dick," Bruce started, though he wasn't quite sure what to say, "you can't keep doing this." OR "If you keep this up," Bruce narrowed his eyes, clenched a fist, and this was the first time in a long time Dick could honestly say he was afraid of his adoptive Father, "there won't be anyone going out of his way to save you."
There are also a few things within that line itself, but I don't want to bombard you. If you'd like to know more or would like me to clarify anything, just let me know in your Review Reply!
Other than a few awkward sentences and a couple grammar issues, this was a good fic! Rock on!
| I.Love.Dick.Grayson 10/14/12 . chapter 1
| ZamShazam1995 10/14/12 . chapter 1
lol the authors note. Are you going to continue this? Please do!
| READINGhearts17 10/14/12 . chapter 1
| batman-defeats-all 10/14/12 . chapter 1
Poor kids watching...
Especially a... particular blond... who happens to be meant for Robin...
| kuromi123 10/14/12 . chapter 1
Poor Red Robin, or is he just Robin in it? Still love Dick Grayson though, no matter what XD
| The-girl-with-purple-eyes 10/14/12 . chapter 1
You did not just kill Timmy ! ( cries hystericaly)
| Guest 10/14/12 . chapter 1
Man, I wanna die. I just watched Before The Dawn on Youtube, so glad this dind't happen, bu yet, I am so glad you wrote this! Awesome job!
| ShadowCatAlex 10/14/12 . chapter 1
Lalalala I CAN'T HEAR YOU OVER THE SOUNDS OF MY FEELS *huddles in ball*