loved it! so sad tho ;_;

i like your style! it's the text without the blank lines between paragraphs that's confusing )

Loved it - wonderfully dark angsty piece )

The idea of the story is good, but you have to work on your style, it was very hard for me to read and to understand, 'cause the sentences were a bit too long and (I don't know the word, damn it!) (let me say it in German: unübersichtlich)
However, I hope my criticism was helpfully :D

Beautiul! I really like this. It was insightful. I loved reading a Raydor/Flynn story from his point of view for a change. It was refreshing. It made me so sad though. I just wanted to give him a great big hug and tell him to hang in there that he'd get the girl eventually. Excellent job! ;-)

AMAZING i wish you would continue 33

I haz a sad. More?