|Reviews for High School for the Certifiably Insane|
| Kallista2 5/9/13 . chapter 12
Excellent story ! I must admit I don't really buy Zero having such emotional turmoils, nevertheless everyone stays in character and I appreciate that very much. My personal favorite is Jack in that respect. Good job !
| Sophia 3/16/13 . chapter 1
Hey, you did a pretty good job! I love borderlands 1/2 and you pictured the charackters very well, thank you for that! Handsome jack was great, hope you carry on writing ;)!
| LavendarFox 3/12/13 . chapter 15
I just stumbled across this yesterday and read it. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It was a very interesting prestory. If i could put a around of aplause on here to be heard. :-)
| Undead Assassin 1/3/13 . chapter 6
Arrow in the knee? You just could not resist could you? lol, did Brick get that angry cause he recognised the joke, or just because he was shot?
| CJ-T-Bone 12/12/12 . chapter 15
Awesome story amigo, i seriously almost cried, I hope to see more of your work very soon.
| apprrett99 11/24/12 . chapter 4
8X5 cars LOL
| apprrett99 11/24/12 . chapter 1
Good story so far.
| Armageddon Coconut 10/31/12 . chapter 15
Well now I'm done reading it's review time! If you can't handle constructive (sometimes) criticism then don't read on. This contains my opinion on what you did wrong and what you did right.
Okay so first of all about the writing itself (not taking plot, characters, etcetera in account). Well it ain't pretty. There's a plethora of spelling mistakes, some of which may be typos, others are clearly actual knowledge gaps (you seem to mix up "two", "to" and "too").
Your story lacks in description. I know most of these characters are already known by the readers, but describing characters and environments is crucial. It also allows you to incorporate your own spin on the characters' appearances should you wish to do so.
Furthermore your writing feels way too rushed. Everything seems to be smoothed over at breakneck speed, leaving the reader with too little detail. Take your time explaining and expanding ideas and points. Don't turn everything into a wall of text though.
Which neatly brings me on to my next point. Your paragraphs are usually too short, but when the action starts you often have massive walls of text which are hard to keep up with and just a pain to read through. Overly long paragraphs are to be avoided.
Also don't switch perspective mid-paragraph. When switching perspective it is preferable to start a new paragraph and to show a demarcation between the old perspective and the new one (eg: a line of * symbols). On a similar note a new paragraph should be started every time the speaker changes. You can't have two different people speaking in one paragraph.
Your action scenes feel too much like lists. X does this. Y does that. X responds with that move. Y then does this move. It gets the point across, sure. But it feels jagged and rudimentary. More like a rough draft than a polished final product.
Now the actual story is where your fic gets good. The idea is entertaining and the final reveal is a great one. Ties the entire story into canon, allowing you to pick up where the game left off in a sequel.
The banter between the characters is as fun to read as it is to hear in the games. Snappy and fun. The more motional scenes however tend to be a little bit weaker, especially between Angel and Zer0, but that might be just me being a heartless bastard.
The presence of such a wide cast of Borderlands characters is also one of your story's strengths. The presence of every Vault Hunter and then some means that everyone can get to see at least some of their favourite character. I'm personally a little sad we didn't get to see Scooter anywhere, and that we didn't get to hear Steve go HEYOO!
I was also pleased to see that you retained Zer0's haiku speech. Kinda sad that you dropped it later on, and I am confused as to how it shows character development. But still, it was nice while it lasted. Maybe that'll be back in the sequel. I also think you should've used his red symbols/emoticons a lot more. They are his primary means of showing facial expressions after all.
One thing I didn't like about your portrayal of Zer0 was you revealing his face. I mean we don't even know if the guy's human, and as you point out he only has four fingers on each hand. Sure he was raised by Stalkers in this, but that doesn't make him lose one digit on each hand. His relationship with Angel would have been deeper if she realised she didn't need to see his face to know she loved him, her way of showing she accepted him no matter what. Plus being faceless is kinda Zer0's thing. It's what makes him Zer0. Taking that away form him doesn't make him feel like Zer0 anymore. It didn't help that I personally (and this is by no means an objective point) wasn't fond of how your portrayed him.
I do believe that's all folks.
| Isaac Clark aka Reven 10/31/12 . chapter 15
that was the single grates story i have ever read on this sight EVER (and i have read 100's believe me , simply fantastic i don't have much words outer than "well done" :) ...
| BubbyGum24 10/30/12 . chapter 15
Great ending, pretty sad though :( I hope the last few lines mean what I think they mean if there is to be a sequel, Roland and Angel were my favorite NPCs in BL2 and it was quite a shock to see them go. Suprisingly loved zer0/angel. Yes I for sure will read more of your stories if they are to come :)
| 00909 10/30/12 . chapter 15
aww you killed Roland. OH well you've set it up now bring him back in an equaly epic sequal.
| RisingS 10/29/12 . chapter 15
Absolutely loved it. Great story.
| GJ115 10/29/12 . chapter 15
| deadpool69 10/29/12 . chapter 14
What if they had to go to a reformatory school on a boat called principle Scarlett's reformatory school just a idea for expanding
| smiley117 10/29/12 . chapter 14
Noooooo i won't let U end this nooooo
Ps you could start doing dlc as an ad-on type thing and then U could make the back stories or something