|Reviews for The First|
| Terrorbyte TC 11/8/12 . chapter 12
I added to the Authors Note at the end of Chapter 12, so re-read that before you go on to 13, which will be up soon.
| Kaldi97 11/8/12 . chapter 12
| The-lazy-bum 11/8/12 . chapter 12
wow... dick move by you...
| SW4G M4N 11/8/12 . chapter 11
Lol, I liked this chapter. If you can, you don't have to of course, can you include more of other characters such as Gaige and Salvador? You don't need to, I just always thought those two were hilarious.
| MEleeSmasher 11/7/12 . chapter 11
Well, this is interesting. I am now intrigued. But have you read New-U? This could pass up as something that I can get behind
| Haycop TC 11/7/12 . chapter 11
keep going... loving this story!
| Basia Orci 11/6/12 . chapter 10
Okay, then. Definitely go with what you've planned for the story (I mean, it's YOUR story after all). I just sometimes get attacked by plot bunnies at the most random times, even when reading other people's fanfics, lol. Oh, and it just occurred to me that if you're going for a Fletcher/Angel romance, then you definitely don't want them to be related. And on that note, I think the Fletcher/Angel pairing would work better than Fletcher/Maya. I mean, isn't Maya close to 30 years old? And Fletcher is just 16, right? That's a really big age gap.
Anyway, this chapter was good! I like how you're being creative about how Angel can use her phaseshift.
| Basia Orci 11/5/12 . chapter 9
Hey, so I decided to review since you replied to my follow (which has never happened to me before). I'm kinda surprised you read my profile, although now I'm painfully aware that I haven't updated the darn thing in years.
Anyway, I enjoyed reading your story and I look forward to further updates. I can definitely tell you're a newbie writer, but I think you have a lot of potential. Your plot is creative and your OC, Fletcher, is slowly developing into a more well-rounded character.
I had an interesting thought while reading chapter 5. What if Fletcher was actually Jack's son? Or even his clone? (I can totally see Jack being egotistical enough to clone himself, lol.)
| Xuufinator 11/3/12 . chapter 8
Very well done story, keep up the amazing work!
| SW4G M4N 11/1/12 . chapter 8
Nice chapter, I really like the Angel backstory and how she used Jack's real name. Keep up the good work!
| Deathtroll 11/1/12 . chapter 1
First. Male. Siren.
we are screwed.
| SW4G M4N 10/30/12 . chapter 6
Can't wait to see Angel kick some ass. Keep writing!
| Guest 10/28/12 . chapter 5
This is awwweeeessssoooommmmmeeee. a male siren is awwweeeeeeeeeeeeeeesssssssss sssssooooooooooommmmmmmmmeee ee.
| megapunch443 10/26/12 . chapter 4
really well-written and fits in with the storyline perfectly
| Haycop TC 10/25/12 . chapter 3
Happy to help anytime brother
Keep going though... loving it!