|Reviews for Behind the Innocent Facade|
| Diane Potter 12/13/12 . chapter 3
Awesome Story! Love it!
| sangkar 12/11/12 . chapter 3
I just /love/ your portrayal of Hermione. It's so in-character, the way her curiosity gets the better of her and her whole conversation with Lockhart. And the ending, ugh. T_T It wasn't /terribly/ cliff-hanger-y, but I'm really curious for the next chapter.
Lockhart was just so perfectly infuriating, the way he brushes off the diary as something nice and innocent, though we all know it isn't. Great job, and thank you very much for submitting this chapter on time!
| Alarice Tey 12/10/12 . chapter 3
Ha! Gilderoy Lockhart... I liked that you made Hermione go to him, it seems so, canon.
[it was not as if Tom Riddle was a Dark wizard intent on killing and harming children; she would have heard of him if he had been a Death Eater], yes, I really liked this sentence...
Once again; you wrote Hermione in a great way. Now, I'm looking forward to the action xD
| PieLover100 11/22/12 . chapter 2
| xhatoyant 11/15/12 . chapter 2
I expected a lot from this chapter, after reading the first one, and it certainly wasn't a disappointment.
The dialogue in this fic between Draco and Hermione was very realistic; like the rest of the fic, I really enjoyed reading it. It's interesting to see how you make these characters interact.
The ending really made me want to read the next chapter, as well.
| xhatoyant 11/15/12 . chapter 1
I loved how you began the fic. It was really what I look for in multichaps; interesting, intriguing beginnings that make me want to read on. I find it hard to do myself.
Your prose was excellent; not too much, not too little. I'm really interested in reading the next chapter, not only because this has an intriguing beginning, but also because it simply makes a very good read.
| BrightestWitchOfHerAge16 11/9/12 . chapter 2
smart girl. brilliant chapter! update soon please.
| Alarice Tey 11/7/12 . chapter 2
How very typical Hermione. You really writes her well. The excitement is built up nicely. And ah, your way of describing things are wonderful. Well done!
| Zinc13 10/29/12 . chapter 1
I liked your beginning; it was very intriguing. The description and everything just really pulled me in.
The ending - before the chapter breaks - is really intriguing as well, since us readers know what that diary is. I think you did;t need to add that extra line, "With horror, Hermione dicovered it was almost dinner..." since that could always go in the next chapter. The chapter break was unnecessary here.
The dialogue was perfect, as was the characterization. It flowed perfectly, even as little as there was.
The characterization was perfect, in terms of dialogue, but also through thoughts, features, and anything else. Hermione's nervousness, unwillingness to hand over the note, curiosity about the diary...perfect. And we ca't forget Madam Pince's suspiscion.
The relationship between the characters seems perfect. Careful as though Hermione may be with books and how much she may love them, Madam Pince doesn't seem like one to see that.
Your writing - the spelling, grammar and punctuation - was brilliant. Canon spellings were also correct; I loved that. I really dislike it when authors spell wrong what was repeatedly in the books.
Since I knew what that diary was, I was basically really suspenseful for Hermione to converse with the diary. I really enjoy this idea and can't wait to see where you take it.
I don't know if the plot has been done before, but so far I haven't read somehting like this. It doesn't seem to be an original idea, since I can sort of see where you're going.
The pace is 'so far, so good' for now. ::smiles::
That's it for now! I can't wait for an update; when Life as Hermione Riddle goes down for construction, can you maybe make this priority?
| Alarice Tey 10/20/12 . chapter 1
A great beginning! I really like your writing style. And what I can see, your way of writing Hermione is really great. Well done!
| reminiscent-afterthought 10/20/12 . chapter 1
I really like the premise of this; intruiging idea, and ironic too that a muggleborn picks up the diary and especially ironic considering how sceptical/weary she was of it at the beginning. Also nicely written and a good setup. I would have liked more of a mention as to what Hermione had been looking for in the library; if this is the second year and that slip was from Lockheart, shouldn't it have been Moste Potente Potions? But you mentioned she passed that one and it sounded like what she was looking for was more general. Since it's an AU, some clarification there would have been nice. But otherwise, intruiging start and I'm looking forward to where you take this.
| HeadlessHuntsman 10/19/12 . chapter 1
This was a very interesting and well written start to the story. I think you have portrayed Hermione very well by showing her thirst for knowledge and how it almost consumes her. I didn't see any grammar or spelling issues, which is always nice to see. If you continue this story it will be interesting to see if Ron or Harry notice the inevitable changes.
| Hermione Voldemort Riddle 10/18/12 . chapter 1
It sounds really good
| HedwigBlack 10/18/12 . chapter 1
Hermione with the diary should be very interesting. I like Tom's part at the beginning. I can just picture him creeping around. Hermione's reason for being in the Restricted Section is in character though I don't know why she would tell Madam Pince that it was to research the Dark Arts. And intending to give the diary to Madam Pince and then forgetting is great. Nice job!