Great story. I love Victoria and Barnabas together in the 1990s mini-series.

This is lovely! You perfectly captured the innocence of the classic TV series and at the same time the otherworldly glamor and romance that seemed to fill the air. I could totally picture all this happening between Barnabas and Vicky!

I don't think any criticism is necessary, but it would be nice to neaten up this amazing tale. You could proofread it and separate the paragraphs a little better. And maybe also shorten up a few of the sentences. But it is such a wonderful story and I hope you write many more!