This is a good idea and you have some striking imagery here. I did notice a lack of proper punctuation, particularly around dialogue, which made this a little harder to read than it should have been. However, with some proofreading/beta work and a bit of revising, I think this will be excellent. Good luck x

Really cool! I wonder whats in the box...
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Good start. A bit confusing but it sounds ok at the moment. Don't lose the fairies at the bottom of your garden. They make your sugar. Xxx