|Reviews for Applepaw's Journey|
| Briarsong-The Thirteenth Storm 3/29/13 . chapter 1
Hello! This is a very short chapter, though it does explain a lot.
Your vocabulary is great, and your descriptive words are perfect.
I just have one thing two things I would like to say. Please, never, ever, ever, ever in writing history, can you use '3' instead of 'three'. It is usually not accepted in writing stories. Also, it does jump a bit. Maybe when you say that Applepaw spotted the rogues, you could mention a twig snapping because one of the rogues step on it.
Otherwise, beautiful work and keep writing!
Stormpaw of Warriors - A forum to remember.
| Veneesla 2/12/13 . chapter 9
Cool, nice twist! Great to know their histories. Star Gazer's a little creepy, just because he knows everything. Now there must be the epic clash of Tigerstar's descendant vs. Firestar's descendant. Bring it on!
| Lilyfrost and Mockingbird 2/10/13 . chapter 1
Hee hee, this IS a very short prologue! Maybe make it longer the next time? That way, we can get a better grasp on your story and what it's about. c:
You seem to have a good vocabulary, which always makes a story interesting. I like how you described her stepping delicately, as it gives a good image on what kind of a cat Applepaw is.
However, I would spell out the word 'three'. It's small and is usually not accepted when typed as '3'.
Moonrabbit, leader of the Warriors - A Forum To Remember
| Eeveewarrior 2/10/13 . chapter 9
The story is awesome! I love it! Keep posting!
| Veneesla 2/8/13 . chapter 8
D: OMG! Did Twistfire just DIE?! Ahh! New chapter, please!
| Veneesla 1/6/13 . chapter 7
Pffft. Hahaha! Smooth moves at the ending there! Let's see some more please! Update soon!
| Veneesla 1/4/13 . chapter 6
Awesome! I can't wait to see more!
| Lilysplash 1/2/13 . chapter 6
Love the name Applepaw! She's so cute! Update soon!
| Kitten With A Tie 11/30/12 . chapter 4
wow. KEEP GOING
| Falling Skies - Ebonyfeather 11/28/12 . chapter 1
I love the cover that you did! It's beautiful!
Usually in writing, it is best to write the word instead of the number for numbers under ten.
I like your story! Keep writing
-Skies, Admin of Book Talk forum
| KirbyofRandom 11/27/12 . chapter 4
Yeah, the whole thing with the queen and her name, it's not Moonpoint, and I couldn't make up or think of another queen my friend is mostly in charge of that. She's writing a story about Fengostar, my other friend possibly will write a story about Cloudtstorm and I'm writing about Applepaw! Who do you think they're gonna tell about Redpaw?
| Veneesla 11/27/12 . chapter 3
I hate it when kits go missing! I must know what happens! Jeez Louise, Redpaw! Your name can be spelt with 4 letters. B-R-A-T. She definitely needs to learn respect but I guess everyone has enemies. I like the clans' history, by the way. Update when you can!
| Kitten With A Tie 11/25/12 . chapter 3
keep going :D
| Veneesla 11/16/12 . chapter 2
Lol, in ya face, Redpaw! Take that! *rubs in Applepaw's victory* Now that that's done, what's this about a mission Mr. Bouncy-light-grey-tom? I must know! Cccccooooooonnnnnnnnttttttti iiiinnnnnnnnuuuuuuuuuueeeeee ee!