aw was hoping darien would see serena in wolf form

This is crap. A good story has us waiting in suspense and shows most of the interesting facts. What you do is telling.

I loved it. This story was so good.

Aww you could have put all the werewolfs go after serena when she put the Youmas and W.H. (werewolf hunters)aside one on each side. And they all transformed to werewolfs and that the group was lead by Serena and Jet in the front and the rest of the pack beind in a triangle. That would have been soo cool that werewolfs would fight! Dont you think! tell me if you would also think so. email me at nataliegmunoz at yahoo dot com. THANKS

It was really good and I hope there is a sequel.

Hi love the story is the little girl Rini? and i think it is kind of gross how with stabing their father in the back (I think that's what it said anyway)I love how Sol,Luna and Artimis (I think thats how you spell it not sure) but the reason I thought it was gross stabing their father is beacuse i hate the sight of Blood or Someone Dying. but other than that i LOVE YOUR STORY

thank you

Rochelle

great story

This sounds interesting and I will have to read it. I like the idea of Serena being a werewolfe. Then I read Snow Stalkers review and I really wanna read this story.

i was reading ur reviews and i personally agree w/ snow stalker. no offense or ne thing but she's right about the whole punk thing and violence. also i agree w/ her about how u left all the werewolves, luna, artemis, and sol out. wat was the point of giving them transformation without having them fighting. also about how jet just suddenly saves serena. i mean it was a little too sudden, don't ya think? it's not that ur not a good writer. u really r one of the best but it's just that u changed there personality too much and made just very sudden events happen.

I LOVE YOUR STORY (Well all of them really) PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE PLEASE!

OK, Saiyangurl, I'm going to be completely blunt about this.

I liked the idea you had for this story, and at the beginning, you really had something going, but near the end, it seemed as though you were getting bored with the story and just wanted to finish it, not caring what you wrote, as long as you wrote something.

I applause your courage for getting the Senshi out of those skimpy mini skirts and giving them a new transformation, but I think what you did give them was a little TOO much. From how I read it, they where from girls with magical powers, each with their own personalities and characteristics, who believed in peace and love, and were willing to fight for it to save the Human race, then they went into this new, more powerful transformation, turning them into dirty, tattooed, overly pierced, sword swinging, PUNKS!

For one thing, the whole "boxers showing, with pants hanging around his knees and the chain hanging out of the pocket" look you have on Darien, is most definitely American; the Senshi are in Japan.

Secondly: The whole chain hanging out of the pocket thing is something guys do. I've never see it on a girl unless they were trying to act like a guy.

Next: Baby-t's, halter and tank tops, belly and muscle shirts? Beanies, backwards ballcaps, and bandannas? Nose, tongue, and eyebrow rings? Tattoo's on both arms on every single one of them? You've turned them into wannabe gang bangers with Swords instead of GUNS!

Another thing: what is with them ALL having swords? And all of them knowing how and more than willing to use them, even Mercury. On top of that, you give them all swords, let them get blasted, then they jump out of the smoke and started HACKING the Youma and Humans (albeit Werewolf Hunters, but still Humans) to pieces. Personally, if I was a civilian there, I think I'd be as afraid of the Senshi as I was of the bad guys!

Not to completely knock you down on the transformations, the wings and the symbol showing are both good ideas, and the whole thing with their hair/eye color going on funky is pretty good too. I've done it myself one or two Sailor Moon fics I've written.

Couple other things I noticed, besides the majorly hinky transformation you gave the girls:

A) what you did with them (giving them sharp objects and having them fight by hacking people up) is something I would have expected from those that were Werewolf, along with the fact that something like the transformation you gave the girls would have gone better on them anyway. B) You gave them all transformation objects, yet you kicked the Werewolves out and never had them transform at all or do anything, they're just sort of THERE. C) You gave Luna and the other's a really cool transformation, yet you didn't use them at all. D) I don't know, it MAY just be me, but I find it kind of pathetic that you lead of to this big fight, hack a bunch of peeps apart, then we run into the main bad guy which turns out to be the reason of all of the trouble that's gone wrong in everyone's lives (of course), then the big dramatic ending is, main bad guy gets a hold of main good guy then main buy guy dies from something as simple as a dagger in his back, thrown by his son that pops out of nowhere. E) Kinda weird that ALL the Senshi just HAPPENED to have had a brother that was kidnapped, and ALL said brother's just HAPPENED to be friends.

Finally, something I couldn't help but notice, and I quote:

"Well they are MOSTLY your friends COUSINS and THREE of them are related to your friends in a BROTHER SISTER WAY."

(Please pay close attention to the words in all caps)

Okay, I'm sorry. I'm done ranting now. Don't get me wrong, I think you're a great writer. I was in the middle of reading "My Personal Hell" before you stopped updating at the beginning of the year, and I've read "Serena's New Found Love" two or three times.

I hope you and the rest of the peeps have fun reading my rant. (don't take it personality; asked just about anyone... I yell a lot... heck, I yell at myself when I go back to read something I've written and there's obvious stupid stuff in it... talk to ShadowWalker, she knows how I am, she's my sister.)

Anyway, I'll stop talking now.

-Snow Stalker-

-May your days be many, happy, carefree & completely free of writers block.-

i think it's stupid how all of a sudden everybody has a brother or sister. it takes away the uniqueness of serena and her twin. does that make all the scouts werewolfs too?

i loved it u have major talent cant wait to read more of ur work

I love chapter 6 it was great. I want to see th e sequel.

I love chapter 14 it was great.