I love this story. You really captured Maria and Georg's emotions. This is the most realistic and romantic wedding night story of the couple posted in Congratulations to you...I love the way this story revolves around their feelings, points of view, and thoughts... This is how love should be... The readers of this story can really feel the raw emotion and the intensity of true love radiating from the newlyweds. As for your grammar and writing technique, it is really good. I am neither American nor English myself, but I am a writer by profession, and I could really say that this story is great. I have read so many versions of this and they all focused on the act that it seemed lustful and disgusting...But your version is simply embodied Maria and Georg... Their characters are very contrasting and I salute you for capturing the personality of both through your writing... I give you a two thumbs up. Please keep on writing... I recommend this story to every TSOM fan... Again, Congratulations!

This was all written beautifully, and it was a long chapter too, which I do love :)

Every little detail was explained, feeling's mainly (which was lovely) but with a the action in there to.

Another lovely chapter, and finished off perfect.

I do hope though, you have a few other ideas up your sleeve, and return with a new story really soon.

Thank you for the story.
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I'm sorry I took so long to review this, because I really, really liked it. It is very hard to write Georg so that he is loving and romantic but still, after all, a middle aged military man, and I think you got him just right. I like the way her confidence grows slowly, in fits and starts. I like how she is innocent and how she reacts to these first experiences. I loved the part where he got stuck in his shirt. I loved the way he teased her about the books! Really, a wonderful story and I hope you will write more.

This is actually quite good! I wasn't expecting much (because it IS hard to capture the character of Maria) but you did wonderful! :D

Very nice story and I really enjoyed reading it. Very well written. Look forward to read more of your stories.

Beautifully written! The characters are portrayed with excellent skill. Keep up the good work! l

Fabulous. I loved how you had so much focus on the feelings & not just the act itself. The raw emotion you expressed in M&G was so sweet. And when the moment came it was beautiful.

I loved this story, it was absolutely perfect! I've read a lot of TSOM wedding night stories and this may just be the best one yet! Such a great story, I can' wait to see what other stories you have in store for your readers! Great job!

Reviewing my own story, how pathetic can you get :D *LOL* No... just wanted to thank the 9 reviewers that took the time to review my story... But I REALLY would love to hear more reviews on chapter 2, as it is the longest and the one I have been working on the most... ;) THANKS :D

That was a great ending. How could there be any negative to this fanfic? I thought you wrote it well and it was impossible to tell that your native language isn't English. I'm almost positive that your grammar is far more advanced than my own! lol

I do hope that you write some more. You really can cast a spell in your story telling and I really enjoyed your writing.

Now I'm off to look up the fic that you mentioned at the beginning of this chapter...lol I'm always looking for good fic recommendations.

A lovely end to an absolutely lovely story! I look forward to reading more of your work!
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yeahyeah maria and the gayorg iayea 5ever o btw its haaard 2 tipe w/ 1 hande.

I would love to see you continue this!

Loved this. Loved the way you used the flashback to draw out the suspenseful waiting for the wedding night. And the button thing was very clever. By the way you did fine with the English. Most Americans couldn't write this well. Hope you update soon!

So cute:-) Aw, I missed gutter stories! Please, go on:-)