|Reviews for Falling Apart|
| me 5/15/13 . chapter 18
my mind is blown. this is an awesome story
| VeritasVamp 5/14/13 . chapter 18
Aw, what a sweet chapter... At least at the end there. I loved Connor's outburst on the bush at the accident site. And it was great to "hear" Murphy laughing again! Keep up the good work! :)
| reedus fan 5/13/13 . chapter 18
You have no idea how much I’ve missed this story. Thank you so much for updating. Every once in a while, I run across one of those stories that just grabs me & holds me from the very beginning. One of those stories I just can’t get enough of. This is one of those rare gems.
I love that you picked up right from the last chapter & let us see just how traumatic that hospital visit was for Murphy. What you write is so realistic & true to how I think both boys would react. I felt so bad for Murphy when he hid in his ‘bedroom’ & how his Ma & Connor treated him afterward was just how a family would treat someone acting that way. I loved that Connor didn’t say anything, he just pushed the plate of food towards Murph. And then waits until Murphy is ready to talk that night, in his own time. So perfect how Connor knew just what to do. I love how Connor is with Murphy, it’s one of my most favorite things about his character and you capture him perfectly. You seem to know exactly what to write to make these characters come alive. And it was unbelievably heartwarming when he pushed the beds together. God, I loved that.
I like seeing the progress Murphy is making, even the little things. And I think he would push himself that hard with the exercises, probably too hard, truth be told. I wonder what would happen if he pushed himself too far & had some sort or relapse though. You capture Murph’s determination, his desperation to get better, brilliantly. When he toppled over & began to argue that he was fine & just needed to do the exercises real quick, that pulled at my heart. And the fact that he’s so skinny & really quite weak is exactly what a person would be in his situation.
You portray mother hen Connor to perfection. I love when Connor has had enough & just takes control. When he picked up Murphy & put him in bed, that was so the big brother taking care of the little brother, whether he liked it or not. And really, what could Murphy do about it? It’s not like he could stop him. And seeing Murphy through Connor’s eyes is something I can’t get enough of. Connor yelling at Murphy & just losing it was inevitable. The situation is harder on him than even he realizes & being so protective but not being able to really do anything would be difficult. This is so raw & written so achingly sad. You present this in a way that is clear without shoving it down our throats. Very gifted writing.
I don’t know why, but I find their fights to be very interesting. They’re brothers, they’re extremely close, but they are going to fight. Especially being around each other constantly & under such stress. Thank you for not shying away from that. And the brotherly bantering is spot on. I just love that. The realization Murphy had during their argument about Connor being just as trapped in the house as he was, was something he obviously hadn’t thought of before. The only difference is, Connor can walk out the door if he wants. And he did. When Connor kicked Murphy’s wheelchair away, that actually shocked me. But I understand he was just trying to protect him from pushing himself too hard. The only thing was, in essence, he trapped Murphy in the bed. That was very ironic & interesting.
I think this situation is just as hard for Connor as it is for Murphy, but in different ways. I mean, Ma didn’t even notice for 2 hours that Connor had his cast off. That’s so sad. And Connor going back to the scene of the accident & reliving it, crying his eyes out. OMG, that crushed me, CRUSHED me. I loved that bit about Connor taking his anger out on the blackberry bush. You weaved together the part about the bush from before the accident to the present seamlessly.
It was so great & wonderful to read about their visit with their friends. You handled that entire part beautifully. It was nice to see both boys happy again, it was a really nice moment to see the boys in a different environment. You write the ups and downs of their situation so well & I’m so impressed. To Connor at that moment, neither brother appears broken any more. It’s kind of bittersweet though, because Murphy really is still a bit broken and I wonder if Connor realizes that.
So as you can tell, I love & adore this story. This was a fantastic chapter & outstanding writing. You are the master of realistic writing. I hope you update soon.
| 9kids 5/13/13 . chapter 18
it was about the time,thanks So much for this chapter.
it was great to see the boys laughing and being around other people.
and I loved twin's fight and Connor's bricking down scene,that was so beautiful ,yelling and crying for all of these things that happened to his brother and himself as well (and because Murphy is just so broken.)God,that was heart breaking.
I'm glad that I can read this great fic again.
please update soon.
| AveTheElfQueen 5/13/13 . chapter 18
Yay! It's been so long since an update, absolutely love it!
| Ruby Red-ink 5/12/13 . chapter 18
Yay new chapter! Loved it! So glad to see the boys out and about, finally really healing. Looking forward to the next one!
| kyri0sity 4/19/13 . chapter 17
What a wonderful story! The effort you've put into the detail, the characters & their interactions clearly shows. It's well written & interesting. It comes off realistically. Well done! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
| guest 4/19/13 . chapter 17
I hope u update soon..pls tell me you will continue this great fic :(
| Guest 4/7/13 . chapter 17
This is really good. Bring on the angst! Please update soon.
| Black Jack and Coca Cola 4/4/13 . chapter 1
This is great! I can't wait to see how this all plays out!
| VeritasVamp 3/30/13 . chapter 17
Hey there, another great chapter! Thanks! The amount of detail you put into the scene with Murphy having the cast taken off made me wonder if you had personal experience. Then I saw your note at the end. Great work!
| 9kids 3/30/13 . chapter 17
thanks for the new chapter
this chapter was beautiful,little short though ,but it dosen't change the fact ..as i said this was a great chap..
Murph had to take all these pain and cry without his reassuring hand of Connor on his shoulder...that scene broke my heart...and god knows what Connor has been through while his brother was somewhere suffering and crying without him knowing..
and I love the first part about the disturbing neighbors and Murph's freaking out and protective Connor (as always)
thanks again,you're great...
| reedus fan 3/29/13 . chapter 17
Thank you for updating! I've been going nutty with anticipation (In all honesty, you could update daily and I'd love it).
"Murphy is handling things well, or so Connor thinks warily." Hmmmm...sounds a bit ominous and makes me wonder how well Murphy really is dealing with all of this. He's only 16 and this situation would be borderline impossible for a young man to handle. I'm surprised he hasn't broken down, become depressed and angry, or just plain difficult.
And this chapter makes me sad for Connor too. I realize with your subtle writing all the things Connor is missing out on while he watches over his twin. That would be so difficult. So much responsibility he feels at such a young age. And the way he protects Murphy when the neighbor barges in...and Murphy's pain...ugh! Brilliant!
I hate that the doctors and hospital staff treat him like an invalid, like he has no say in what they do to him. They practically ignore him at some points and seem a bit uncaring, and Murphy seems to become the "faceless patient," poking and prodding at him and not bothering to tell him what's going on. I want to protect him from this pain, to yell out on his behalf...that's how well you wrote this entire bit. And when Murphy's pleading for them to stop? And then they make him cry in pain when they manipulate his leg? OMG, that made me a bit uncomfortable, I'll admit, probably because it was so realistic and raw.
So I'm a little long winded in my review, but this was a phenomenal chapter, heartfelt and beautifully written. Your story pulls at my heart strings. I hope you update soon. Pretty please.
| Rat 3/29/13 . chapter 17
This was written beautifully. My heart broke for Muprhy. Great writing.
| mina 3/18/13 . chapter 16
I love your story and love your writing as well.
These two last chapters were great, I love the way you make sure to tell all the details... Just little things like murphy's little panic in thr car... Or Ma making a place in the livingroom for boys...for both of them, and not just murph's cause she knows how much they need eachothers.
Also love the final scene from Ma's point of view.
I wont speak about the connor and sleeping murph part anymore but that scene was just imazing and beautiful and little heartbrocken!
Please Keep up the good work ,thanks