|Reviews for Red Velvet: A Paily Story|
| checkerboard321 5/27/13 . chapter 19
Another great chapter. Gotta love when characters go to the bathroom huh? :-)
And Riley's song choices were hilarious.
| checkerboard321 5/21/13 . chapter 18
Thou hast finally sat herself down to read this. Mind you it wasn't easy because my sister wouldn't shut up and allow me to concentrate. Anyway, i'm here to review so review I will do.
I instantly smiled when Emily was speaking to Mary (she'll always be Marley to me) at the bar as I just love reading scenes with those two in it. I love them together and that special bond they have. Aaah, and Mary commenting on the "test results". Amazing! And the lip gloss. God that takes it back a lot of chapters. Fuck I love this story. Yas! The cupcakes! I wondered if they would be written in. Maple Bacon Spring Break, amen! And black forest. Yas! Sorry, I am getting distracted. Haha! "Suck it". This is amazing. All the joys i'm getting out of a few paragraphs about cupcakes. Oh my. Totes man, totes fucking amazeballs. I bet nobody writes reviews like I do. Mines are not even reviews, they're just me chucking down my comments as I read through the chapter, resulting in this daft jumble of words.
And i've missed Peter. It seems like a while since he's been around.
A shower that fills the room with steam so quickly... I wish I had one of those. Mine goes from ice cold to boiling warm and back again. It's not always the most pleasant experience. But again I digress. Lovely Paily developments here, and nice to see them in the loft away from the train imagining a life outside the circus. Obviously, I love the circus and all of that, but still it was cool to see a different possible Paily if that makes sense.
I got tears when Marley was in her foster home kitchen showing off her English and French skills. Now I just visualise Kat/Max each time I read about Marley and I see her there in the kitchen, and I see the other characters and picture the scenes in my head. It just makes it so much more real to have a face, a voice, a way of acting and jeez. I have goosebumps. And the plaid couch... I know someone on Twitter who has a plaid couch. I wonder if it has something to do with this one. And the rest of the story, I have no words to put down. But I couldn't take my eyes of the screen reading it. Poor Marley.
| saii79 5/14/13 . chapter 22
I loved this chapter so much! Sexy time was sexy as hell! I loved how they joking around with the "Did you have sex in my car?" question. LOL. My fav part was the Paige - Riley talk, when Riley told Paige that he can't tell Marley how he feels, because Cole ruined everything, and Paige just told him, you don't have to, just show her how you feel. Damn, that part was perfect! Just like the prank against Peter, it was hilarious. LOL. Poor guy, not because of the prank (myself don't mind to witness something like that), but he spent days alone with Sadie and Faye. I still don't get how he survived. He deserve some rest/vacation.
The whole chapter was light and fun, it was perfect as always! Thank you my friend, love you! And can't wait to read about Purple Satin! :)
| MORENADECA 5/13/13 . chapter 22
There was aloy happening in this chapter and I loved it. Paige's relationships with everyone are incredible, and the way Emily is getting on with them as well. Your story is very well developed. Can't wait for the next bit.
| lainierb 5/13/13 . chapter 22
OMFG...I absolutely adored this chapter! It was so much fun to see the four of them clowning around and being crazy together and just forgetting about their cares for now. And the cloak and dagger sex...fucking awesome. Yes, sex happens FOR EVERYONE and it better continue, GAH DAMNIT! Oh, except I'm with Riley, please keep Peter away from Parker, I'm sorry...that's my only request. ;) Happy Writing as always! And I KNOW RV:PS is going to knock our socks off! Keep your chin up! Love you! 3
| BokononCradle 5/13/13 . chapter 22
I love the whole "did you have sex in my car?" joke ha. It's just one of many things that shows your characters are fleshed out and I feel like I know them so well already. Looking forward to what you have planned next!
| Sazar 5/12/13 . chapter 22
The perfect distraction to a boring as hell day of revision. Can't believe it's over :'( but I'm already anticipating Purple Satin.
Honestly the perfect ending. I couldn't stop laughing when they all dropped trou, didn't see that coming. I thought they were going to be all bad ass and jump onto the train but no, that didn't happen. LOL
Thank you for always brightening my day with this amazing story can't wait for Red Velvet Act II: Purple Satin you know I'll be reading ;)
| Joker29 5/11/13 . chapter 1
what happens to paige and mary are they going to be friends again? Are they going back to the circus or is paige going to cancel until they get mary back? where are they driving to? Did paige get raped? Please keep going I love it and sorry if I offended you before.
| checkerboard321 5/11/13 . chapter 17
I have no words to review half of this chapter. Just this: (Y)
As for the rest of the chapter. Marley girl! Loved the Dark Angel reference, I loved that show!
A cherry coke huh? Nice. I must confess that I bought a pack of those Rachel's forbidden fruits yoghurts today just to eat the cherry one. While reading a later RV chapter. Dontcha know.
And that polite wee boy at the service station, aww! Just as cute as little Molly. And then those kids bullied him and I was all "nooooo". Then Riley happened. "Yeeees!'. Fucking amazeballs! And then Marley happened. And oh man, I just. That poor wee boy didn't expect that when he woke up that morning. LOL!
And Ember. That was just hilarious. And goosebumps at the ending. That Cassie girl can suck it now!
Hard core superstar by far, you're the ultimate star.
| checkerboard321 5/10/13 . chapter 16
I adore Mollie. She's just too cute. And the language in your fanfic, always a bonus for me :-) Totes amazeballs. Emily's interactions with Cassie. Love it! Emily's got nerve. And Marley/Mary said "Suck it". Ahahahaha! I almost laughed in the office. I had tears from holding back. I was getting flashbacks while reading to older chapters with them lying beside each other on the couch with their fingers touching, and little Stella, and I was getting goosebumps. I don't know why I waited so long to read this chapter. Shame on me! And the Emily and Riley "bromance" and "man purse" lol! And Marley is gonna be texting Pam?..ahahah! And the ending. Holy crap the ending. Tears, Goosebumps. Shivers. Totes amazeballs girl, Totes amazeballs.
| Michelle 5/8/13 . chapter 1
I seriously love this story. Can't wait for chapter 22!
| lainierb 5/3/13 . chapter 21
First and foremost...this whole chapter gave me goosebumps. :') AMAZING! IT HURT SO GOOD! ;) Going back to the accident, as hard as it was, it was much needed to show the camaraderie and rallying around Paige. And UGH...the importance and significance of Marley being Paige's emergency contact makes my heart melt. 3 And tie that together with the talk with Emily and the purple note...so perfect! Oh how I love Riley everyday more and more...he really is the perfect guy! ;) I love how Paige messes with him. Happy Writing...don't put up with shit. You're amazing. I love you! Red Velvet rocks!
| Sazar 5/3/13 . chapter 21
Damn your amazing. That's all that needs to be said.
Quite frankly I can't think of anything else to say, you literally leave me speechless, I love everything about this story.
| ShurriG88 5/2/13 . chapter 21
So I have to start this by saying, aww, Wyoming isn't that bad. ;) Other than that, another wonderful chapter. I admit that I hope the beginning of the next chapter leads off where this one was ending, but I am pretty much a sucker for the couples you have created. I like it when you are in Emily's head, not that I don't like the Marley POV (I do) I just like seeing Emily come out of her shell more and more and head toward the badass we know and love. As I have said before this is a great story and I look forward to the next chapter and whatever awesomeness it has in store. :)
| BokononCradle 5/2/13 . chapter 21
Haha I love Marley and Paige's friendship. "Baby, don't fight it." Can't wait for the next update :)