|Reviews for Mistake|
| Eleavir 6/9/13 . chapter 9
LOVE this chapter!
The aftermath of the explosion is actually better than what I had in mind. I seriously thought someone was gonna lose someone or something dearly. But both survived. Dickie is elated. All is well.
The part I like the most is when Dami tries to get his big bro Jay to move. It's like an echo from the past, only this time it's a helpful Damian trying his best to persuade an unresponsive Jason. Reminds me of their happy meal days. (Big D has no idea what he has missed.) I especially like the part where Damian, at his breaking point, begs Jason in a whimper. Really shows his growth.
Tim is...kind of having the best dumb luck ever. Good for him.
Dickie is trying to be the big bro for all his brothers. Well...Good luck?
Can't wait to see the (happy) end!
| OxOMatryoshkaOxO 6/8/13 . chapter 8
I was re-reading my previous review and I noticed I totally messed up in what I was trying to say in this one paragraph (actually I messed up a lot XD I should read through before I posted...But it was almost 5 in the morning so...). What I should have written in the 9th part was:
Tim's entire speech there is perfect. I can't believe you were even able to come up with Tim's reaction and make it seem so much like Tim. Extremely in character and so Tim. So Tim and so perfect. And the way you wrote it sounded like Tim as well.
| OxOMatryoshkaOxO 6/7/13 . chapter 9
Oh god. I was reading my other reviews and I sound like...Young. Too young...Sorry about that...(I'm a sophomore in high school)
Anyway, as always, you did a marvelous job on this chapter! And the whole story in general...I've gotta admit, I was a bit worried when you brought Talia in, and with the bomb, and with the ending of chapter Up High, Down Low...But you did it! Everything is...Just perfect XD I think, Talia had/has a fine part, and I like the fact that she doesn't actually know, but she thinks she does. So that's really cool XD 'm still a little curious on /how/ she "knows" though (unless you mentioned it in the last chapter and I forgot...).
Annnddd since I didn't review for a while. I'm gonna to you all the things I remember I really wanna tell you. Because there are these two scenes that just. Just got me. Like a bunch:
"Damian placed the hoodie on the bedspread and jumped down the bed, his eyes narrowing and turning thoughtful as he moved closer to Tim. He stopped beyond arm reach 'If your doppelganger ever comes near me again' Damian enunciated sarcastically slow, as if Tim wouldn't be able to understand otherwise 'I will kill you. Both of you.'
This wasn't a temper tantrum or a show of power. Looking at his eyes, Tim had no doubt at all that there'd be no stopping him. Damian would kill him.
Then Damian tore his gaze away jerkily and swallowed hard, closing the door with a soft click, and for the first time Tim understood the damage he had done, even if he didn't remember it.
'I hope you do.'"
The line about Tim's realization on what his actions cause was just...Too great. In such a sort little thing you made it sound so...Powerful (at least to me)
And there was this other sentence I found too great:
Tim sighed, leaning his elbows on his knees "Sometimes I wish I could remember, you know? 'Cause it all seems so distant I actually forget to feel guilty, and I cannot ever let that guilt go, it wouldn't be fair to Damian. Then I realize how awful it would be to know, how I would never be able stare anyone in the eye ever again, knowing how it felt to…" he shakes his head, as if clearing his thoughts "And I'm glad I don't remember. Isn't that horrible?"
Tim's entire speech there is perfect. I can't believe we were even able to come up with Tim's reaction and make it sound (in both what it is in general and you worded it) so...Tim. So Tim and so perfect.
(must all you endings be so amazing? *_*)
Also, did I ever tell you how adorable the Damian-likes-to-'perch-in-high-places thing was? Because it's super cute x3
(completely random thought) I really hope Damian does end up telling Dick about it, eventually. I /really /wanna to hear ...er, read...how Damian would describe what happened to him, in his words.
This entire story as a whole is fantastic. And it amazes me /a lot/ how you could be given something like a one-shot that was practically only a rape scene, and create...This! It's wonderful :D I'm pretty sure I said this before, but I love your writing. All the characters are perfectly in character (and super adorable XD), the vocabulary is fantastic, it's descriptive, and this is going to sound odd but, everything is described perfectly XD And it's hilarious! Every single chapter I enjoy and find my self /at least/ smiling at something. (I really loved the ending to Damsel, by the way! XD).
I'm going to super sad to see this story come to an end! It's one of my favorites! I think I'm gonna start reading the rest of your work (that's in English XD)...
Sorry for the super long review!
| Dextra2 6/6/13 . chapter 9
| colossalray 6/5/13 . chapter 9
I love this. Damian is adorable and this is my kind of story. Oh golly, I don't even know what to say other than "please write more soon I want to know if Jason's okay!" What is it with that boy and explosions, anyhow?
| Luminores 6/3/13 . chapter 8
This is a great story! Jason and Damian is my favourite robin's too:-))
Trough I really hope that it will end well for them and that Damian and Jason reconnect, I can't stand them being on bad terms with each other:'-(
| T. Alana M 5/11/13 . chapter 5
I pity Tim when Damian's parents find out. He is so lucky Bruce is still 'dead'. Talia, though, is the leader of a group of psycho assassins and Damian is her son. You do NOT rape a mother's baby and get away with it! Talia will murder you, Tim!
| pancakes-are-not-for-throwing 5/10/13 . chapter 8
dude. dude, dude, awesome Awesome_Wallpaper_by_jiminy_ look at it.
| J.Nelle 4/6/13 . chapter 8
I do not think this revenge was lame at all. In fact, it seemed cold and calculating and fit the way I would imagine Talia to think. Though perhaps her son's assailant would have died a more /personal/ death, say beaten to death by an assassin, herself, or maybe making Damian kill him, just because she might have taken the attack on her own son personally and therefore would like to be there to witness it herself or carry it out by her hand.
But anyways, I do like the tactical way you had Talia set everything up and I can't wait for the next chapter.
| ALANA 3/27/13 . chapter 8
Yes, it has been. UPDATE SOON PLEASE THIS IS SO FREAKING AWESOME AND I SO FREAKING LOVE YOU
| READINGhearts17 3/26/13 . chapter 8
Well I hope this ride ends in a happy way!
| Moon-Fox13 3/26/13 . chapter 8
Awesome chapter but I got relly sad at the end...
| Eleavir 3/26/13 . chapter 8
Das cliffhanger! Is Jay blind?
So Talia knew, huh. Too bad for Timmy. Her words can still get into Damian perhaps because after all, he's half al Ghul (which I don't consider a bad thing).
Dickie is showing all kinds of bromance in this chapter. It's rather comforting to a post-traumatic kid, even though the said kid secretly wants something more, something his big bro's unable to give, such as revenge.
It makes me a little sad when I see your notice that this wonderful story is coming to an end. How many chapters do we have left to indulge ourselves? Anyway, you've done a great job writing this one. I would hope to see the next update soon. *cross my fingers*
| Dextra2 3/26/13 . chapter 8
| colossalray 3/26/13 . chapter 8
Ahh cliffhanger! You meanie.
Nice work on this chapter. Has me craving more.