Eh, I guess you're right, it's not much. But it's certainly good enough for me! And you're still learning, so it's all good.

Oh, yes, yes, yes, yes The plot is going somewhere really good, and everything sounds so smooth, almost professional... It's perfect, it's lovely, it's brilliant, I love it

Now all it needs is some romantic exposition and I will officially be at your beck and call forever.

Oh yes. This is much, much, much better. Poor Suwa, again. One little piece of advice, though, when you have people making long speeches like you did, say what they're doing while they're talking. Like when their expressions change, or if they start doing anything with their hands. No one ever just stands stock still while giving a big speech, at the very least they look around at whoever's listening. And reading something like that is just boring, unfortunately. Putting in a motion pause or two makes it sound a little smoother, like time is passing, instead of some kind of weird soliloquy.

And before I forget, thank you, thank you, THANK YOU for having Monica beating the crap out of demons, too! I was so happy! You remembered to make her a badass!

That was really short! Are you having trouble coming up with ideas or something? Because I can help you if you need it, it really feels like you're struggling...

Or if you just need time to figure out how to move the story along and still want to update semi-regularly, just start adding a bunch of romantic filler. That's what I'd do.

I'd really, really like it if you updated this more, is what I'm trying to say xD

Haha! I didn't think that's how they'd get found at all! That was funny!

Aaaawwww... Poor Sylvan. And poor Suwa, too. All confuzzled and stuff.

Needs some looking back at the rest of the party, haven't heard from them in a while.

Aw, man. Poor guy. You managed to pack a nice bit of plot into a bite-sized chapter.

Can I give you some advice on this one? How about a little backstory about Suwa and Monica's lives in the village? Did they even know each other or what? Trying to figure out their relationship here is getting kind of difficult...

Yay! New chapter. Suwa's such a nice guy.

Aw man, I can't wait for the next chapter, it's starting to get really good!

Sorry I didn't give you my feedback earlier, I went out for a while. :(

Oooh a party! This is gonna be fun!

Or possibly awful, but that's okay too.

Oh no not Kanmuri ;_;

Spooky-scary

This is getting good.

Wow. I wasn't expecting a lot, but this is actually pretty cool.

Suwa isn't near grumpy enough, though. He's supposed to be a tsundere! Where's the tsun?