omggggggggggg i loved this chapter when are you going to write more?

Banter ... I love banter. You did a really nice job with the dialogue and I love the little bit of backstory for Chon about him living in a trailer alone. It's nice when the tough guy is given vulnerabilities.

Now that I've seen the movie, I can hear Taylor's voice in the dialogue. Great job :)

Oh it was so worth the wait :)
I love how you play with words, how you describe both Nina and Chon so bluntly, so real. And the tension is so ... aaaahhhh :D Keep it coming, girl! I'm a huge fan already!

Great story so far!

Well this seems like a promising story :)

LOVE IT! please update soon!

Interesting. Keep the updates coming! Hope you will include a bit of the movie later on. Could be intense.

Duh ! This sounds really good ! Chon, I love him and I love ""Seville is in Spain... dumbass."" Made me laugh my ass off. Anyway, I kinda like Carolina and I can't wait to read more !

Love this "Chon felt his head spinning like a slot machine, memories revolving in his brain at the speed of light. The pieces of the past started falling into place. First slot, 1998. Second slot, the girl who loved speed. Third slot, castanets and twelve string guitars. Jackpot: Carolina Zamora.

What are the fucking odds." really clever opening.

The flashback fit perfectly and I all the interactions were great - I really like Carolina's banter with Russell, some great lines there.

Flawless. Can't wait to read more of your amazing work 3

Great set up here - you have all the pieces in place for an interesting story to unfold. You know how much I love your writing and I can't wait to see where you take this one :)