This is really awful. Interesting idea, but badly written. It could be cleaned up with better sentence structure, appropriate punctuation and tighter word usage.

loved it, but its a one-shot and I need more because it was great. loved the way hathaway was portrayed in this. everyone despite the saddness of the story seemed sort of happy, like everything worked out.

That was a very emotional story. Are you going to write a follow up on how Ken became James' Sargent?