Reviews for Shadowy Undercover Mission
gamingkitty 11/13/12 . chapter 2
Poor SnakeEyes seems to be the only one seeing Jinx as "little Kimi", even her cousin has figured out she's an adult.

Two hours over the rooftops and Snake gets to the building at the same time Jinx does? That's a hideous commute, is she using public transit? (And if so, how is she avoiding breaking cover by decking someone going for a quick grope?)

It'll be interesting to see Hawk's response to the meeting Snake wants to set up. Too bad BH is at Benning or we could see how accurate StormShadow's assessment was ;) .
TinySprite 11/12/12 . chapter 2
Ha ha! Love Storm Shadow in this one, Snake Eyes too. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Totenkinder Madchen 11/12/12 . chapter 2
Dusty and Jinx are freaking adorable! Dusty trying to maneuver around with the towel over his face sounds perfect, and Jinx just knows she's tormenting him, doesn't she?

Ooooh, Storm, you do NOT pick on Scarlett. Bad move, buddy. *tsk tsk* I like where this is going, though. Storm's transition from Cobra to Joe is one of those things that needs to be expanded on in fiction, and I'm glad you're touching on it. It's good stuff!
PrimeEmily135 11/12/12 . chapter 2
Yay! I hope Stormshadow joins Joe. :) and I love the part with Dusty and the towel. :)
Quathis 11/12/12 . chapter 2
Yes, Snake Eyes doesn't do the protective big brother role very well, at least, the effect it's supposed to have on the female target. Dusty seems to think he's doing a bang up job of it.

Tommy showing up was fun. They have good banter, even when trying to give backhanded advice.

Until next time.
OhtarIstar666 11/12/12 . chapter 2
Poor Snakes. No back up for him... :)
Lady Jaye1 11/9/12 . chapter 1
I've finally had a chance to read this! After months of you struggling to work on this and complete it, I must say that so far your effort is paying off. It's refreshing to see Jinx and Dusty as part of the "main cast" of a fanfic, plus Snake Eyes is awesome, as always. I lol'd at his sudden kinship with Beach Head. I look forward to reading more of this.
Agent-M-0167 11/8/12 . chapter 1
Looking forward to the next Chapter. Keep up the great work!
LadyJoe 11/5/12 . chapter 1
I really loved the chapter (I'm a total Jinx-fangirl) but I thought Snake-Eyes saying Dusty was Gaijin just made no sense. Wasn't the split with the Red Hand precisely because the Arashikage were training him? I feel like it's out of character for someone who went on to take on a white apprentice (r.e. Kamakura) to complain about Kimi fraternising with gaijin. Having said that, it's still a really great chapter :)
Yuki 11/5/12 . chapter 1
Hahahahaha, Looks like Karma is really getting Snakes back. This has a great start to it. Really can't wait for more :D
PrimeEmily135 11/5/12 . chapter 1
Yay! I'm so glad you've posted another story. First chapter was great! Can't wait for more. :)
Gambit 11/5/12 . chapter 1
Welcome back! Jinx is going to give Snake Eyes an aneurysm by the end of this mission. Strange Dusty would rather be in Duluth; it's usually cooler there than Minneapolis. Keep up the good work!
maverickiceman 11/4/12 . chapter 1
No Beachead? I'm gonna go on strike! All Willwrite4fics, require a RDA of the sarge major! And not the piddling tiny amounts of mention that is here. We require the sarge to appear in all his kick-ass glory!

P.S: Clutch, winter's setting in here, bud. I'd really appreciate if you got a few bikini shots of C.G and L.J and Jinx to send me, so I can remember the joys of summer.

Maverick
OhtarIstar666 11/4/12 . chapter 1
So funny! Cannot wait for chapter 2!
TinySprite 11/4/12 . chapter 1
Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one!

Also, poor Dusty. This is not going to be easy on him...
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