The way that you used the song! It is brilliant! Very beautifully written! Although I can't say I like what Sarah's become (Man it made me so sad!)

I loved this. I would really like to see it expanded upon, you have a very unique writing style that impresses me :)

At first it took me a little while to figure out how you twisted in the ballad of Mona Lisa with this story and then the dumb ass in me cleared up and it was a sort of an OOH moment and now i feel so much better for understanding. Anyways a good story so far but i am sort of hoping you go more in detail with the sex scenes... not that i'm a pervert or anything... ... ... that wasn't convincing at all. GOOD JOB! very clever with the sonf by the way.

I'm liking the tension between them. *grin*

ohhhh...I like it looks to be quite fun to read!

Damn. Can't wait for the next one!