Hm, its really interesting to hear about Billy, which is a character you don't normally hear about. I have to agree with the previous reviewer about the language, it was a little much. Other than that, I really like your writing style and detail. Interested to read more when you put the next chapter up! :)

Maybe people would give you a chance with your story if you didn't have all the F words flying out everywhere. You have good grammar and the story seems interesting but the profanity needs to go if not then rate this M for raunchy language. I actually tried to enjoy it but the language is way too much.

Just helping you out I'm not flaming.