Nice chappy, as always. :)
Can Hank now use his bullet time when he wants?
Or does it activate during an adrenaline rush or something.

So sorry it took me this long to leave a review. I've been a but swamped with school stuff lately.

Wow. I'm honestly in awe at how you plan things out and how you hav things all tie together in not just this story, but all of your other ones as well. The dialogue in this chapter was great, as well as all if the battle scenes, and there were so many clever references scattered thoughout the chapter. Seriously, bravo. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.

c: I wonder what Corey said when Shane said; "Hey! You eat your food with those fingers! Don't say that in front of the kids!"

XDDDDDDDD THAT WAS FUNNY, if I were Corey I would have replied something along the line of; "Shane, you know for a fact I don't eat."

lol, I'm just glad I was able to get the file open for you to upload this last night, hope the computers don't troll you too much though

I really like this virtual arena jazz, I'm just assuming that you could hang off the edge or something undetected.
That could lead to a sneaky kill or something :P

Whoa. This was an AMAZING chapter. You managed to cover the backgrounds of many of the characters, and it all tied together, too. There were some epic scenes, HILARIOUS dialogue ("Dick-Biscuit" is my new favorite swear word, holy crap), and great plot progression. I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Thank you so much, by the way. I really mean it, wow.

HOLY FUCKING SHITDICKS! You have out done yourself again, and Sacrom574, you aswell have made the story a good read too, i can already tell that more then the Holo-Battle against Black Snake will be good, nice work both of you.

"Dick-Biscuit."

"The fuck is a dick-biscuit?"

"W-well, it's a...uh…I don't actually…know…"

Now that can make my day a whole lot better, hey sorry for yelling at you, I was frustrated I had to let something out...sorry man if I hurt your feelings in the note reply

This was awsome! And it was hilarious! Keep up the good work and was that a red vs blue reference in the beginning?

You missed a division line between "Shut the fuck up" and 'Hank walked back to his room.' Rather, the system fucked you over.

Oh and this was an awsome late birthday present

I can only describe these 2 chapters in one word EPIC. I am going to do a double review of chapters 17 and 18

Ch 17: This chapter was awsome I thought it was funny how Aiden's squad leader is bitching out Mikhail and he is just acting aloof the whole time, the bet has just made things a whole lot more intresting and I also liked the fact that you were inspired by plasma burst 2 for the hologram chamber (its an awsome game) and I cant wait to see more of it.

Ch 18: Thise chapter was pure awesomeness but the match in the hologram chamber felt like it ended a little sooner than it could have but it was still awsome. The part in the cafeteria was just plain hilarious and I love how you are handling Eli and Hina's characters keep up the good work! And the part with hank and the pie was just perfect and I cant wait to see what happens next UPDATE SOON!

HOLY SHIT! you portrayed everything perfectly! i could not have even come close to what you did, i am amazed, i don't think anyone in hanks group expected DJ to explode and drag Eli and both Walkers to the ground and beat the shit out of them too, DJ is going to regret it in the future, but for now, i am going to read this chapter at least 3-4 times in a row!

Dude, about your Author's Note...geometry SUCKS. I'm really dreading it next year. Good luck with that.

This was a really entertaining chapter to read. And is the Red Team and Blue Team thing a reference? I think I'm having sudden nostalgia here...

Anyways, I loved the fight between the group, and the dialogue. The pie part was hilarious. Poor Hank, though. It must be new to him to get embarrassed over things.

All in all, this was another great chapter. You have some great character development going, and I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter.

Holy crap, it took me too long to get to actually reading it due to having to help out with things around the house, but this was so worth the wait.

First off, Agent 574 has completely won me over in this chapter. The way he handled things was really a defining moment in his characterization to me, and very expertly done. Nice work.

I have to admit, the Calcium Regenerator made me smile a bit more than it should have. I couldn't help but be reminded of that one scene in Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets where Harry has to take that medicine to make his bones grow back.

Alright, the whole Holographic Chamber part was incredibly clever. The set-up was very interesting, and I loved the little Star Wars reference.

All in all, this was a great chapter, and I can't wait for the next one.

Oh Sweet mother of Scot, this is one of the best chapters, not just because DJ's appearance in it or his actions, but because you have introduced a new factor to the story, very well done, i just have to ask though, what happened to DJ's hand? and his powers?