|Reviews for The first travel|
| Ninjagirly 11/23/12 . chapter 1
Pretty good and rather interesting.
Just one mistake that I saw; "Oh, sweet fang I'm, that's why a couldn't answer.."
the I'm is suppose to be I am. I know, english is rather confusing but you don't abbreviate I am in that kinda of sentence. Sorry, kinda hard to explain. ;
| Guest 11/13/12 . chapter 1
This was pretty good, especially since English isn't your first language. You should make the chapters longer though. Good job though!