Lyra really have an impact, isn't she ? Unlike some OC of others story.
Anyways, this story here It's a very nice story.

Nice story. I think all of us fans really want to see some romance betweem Lyra and Jade- even better so if one of the group (prob guy) had seen it.

I hope you continue this soon though.

This is brilliant. I think I've been looking for this kind of story since the first time I played Abyss (no, don't ask me when, I don't remember anyway)
Also you seem to have a knack for making the characters IC, I really like it.

And I REALLY hope you keep going, it would be a shame if you didn't. ;) I'll be waiting for the next chapter.

I'm really enjoying this so far, and I can't wait to see how you take the next section of the game to make it different and to discover more about Lyra.

Overall, one thing I really appreciate is that, even though you follow the base of the conversation that occur, you change every single line in them. It's very refreshing, not having to read the same, maybe slightly reworded, lines. Your writing style is fantastic, and you put so much into your descriptions. It's just great (And Jade hasn't been out of character as far as I can tell!).

I've put a lot of time into reading as much as I can about the history of Auldrant as I've been able to, so some of the history of the Qliphoth/Outer Lands that you've written isn't 100% accurate, but I like what you've done with what the game/anime provided you with, and coming up with your own take on it.

Romances take time to build, so take it as slow as you want it to grow :) Keep on writing! I look forward to future chapters!

I just read through all eleven chapter of this fic. I beg of you to keep writing. I usually don't like OC's but Lyra's just plain interesting. Although I still don't know why she's there now, I know her relationship to Jade and whoa. So why was she dismissed? And what's the act against him? More, please. Also, stop worrying about the OOC thing. Jade's Jade, and that in itself is incredible.

So far, so good. I don't know if it's just me, but everyone in this fanfic seems really, REALLY IC. Well done. Keep writing - I wanna know who the OC is. D: