Oh, this is fabulous. I love it.

Very nice story, but one dialogue correction: Charlie's line to Mac after Will's "Sancho, my armor, my sword!" command is "Which one of us is he talking to?" not "Which one of us is his organ donor?" Sam Waterston's delivery is a little muddled (as, I'm sorry to say, is a good bit of his dialogue in this series; has there been any reports of him being in poor health?), but I just re-watched and confirmed.

Again, an excellent buildup of the growing avalanche in Will's mind. Just one correction to remove the distraction.

Great writing... I absolutely love this...

I LOVE how we can hear exactly what Will is thinking throughtout this - especially when he realises Mac hasn't got the message... Brilliant!

Excellent writing - I hope you write some more Will & Mac!

THanks for posting...
:)

GREAT story! I love Will's train of thought in this, you write his voice so well!

I hope you keep writing Will/Mac!

wow...i love this so much...i love how you interpreted Will's thoughts...

great fic!

I hope he told her what he said on the show...*sad*