This story is a really enchanting idea. I'm really anticipating Galadriel’s and Celeborn’s reunion, and will love to see where you go with this story. Your narrative is always very excellent; you cover all the salient points such as emotions, and plot faultlessly. Well done.
This story is well written, and I really liked how you express the characters. Well done on the characterisation! Feanor in particular is especially believable, with a voice and personality which fits my mental image of the indomitable high king perfectly. Middle aged Galadriel is somewhat similar to the younger counterpart we saw in Aman. I like how you've further developed her character into a diplomat and politician. She’s trying to reconcile her lust for power with herself. It’s all a part of her journey to become the powerful leader we see in LOTR. It’s a shame that elves of cheerful mien are lacking from the story. All the characters feel slightly dour, and the story could benefit from a bit of hilarity.
You really can not ask me to identify the single moment I loved best in this - because I liked it from the initial firebrand hair scene where she defends the Vanyar.
I would love to see Galadriel and Celeborn marry, but I think it's not going to happen...it’s been 8 years since you wrote this.
Your plot is great, and really true to the silmarillion! I couldn’t wait to read chapter after chapter because they were logically developed with just the right amount of mystery. If the ending is anything like this and you write it in the same well planned style, you really will keep me in anticipation through out! Please finish the story!
I feel the need to praise your spelling and grammar because it’s really annoying when some authors don’t even bother to spell-check! Your story has minimum spelling mistakes and very good grammar, so well done! I did find a few in the earlier chapters. I wasn’t sure if I should point them out.
I get the impression that you think about your backstory very thoroughly. So many characters (e.g: the Feanorions) all have their own individual backstories and you create very colourful characters by integrating the many backstory details into the story flawlessly, in my opinion.
Your dialogue has so far clearly conveyed characters’ personalities and/or emotions and is marvellous.
I admire your dedication to this universe; you've stuck with it for over 80,000 words, despite the few reviews (i.e: little encouragement) you received! I hope that you will stick with the characters until the end, because your fic is of very high quality and the characters still have lots of potential in my opinion. Celeborn especially has lots of potential for character development. If you choose to explore the love between Galadriel and Celeborn, you could develop his character and kill this bird with the same stone. This story is seriously under-reviewed IMO, bearing in mind it's quality. I feel a bit sad on your behalf, since you've done better than many fanfic authors and have completed many high quality chapters with high quality imagery. You deserve more reviews.
Your writing is so awesome! You've GOT to finish this. Please please. You've written amazingly, and the story still has SO much potential. I’m off investigate your other stories now…
I'm loving your story so far. Fingers crossed -here's me hoping it's complete. The part which really caugt my emotions was when normally peaceable Finarfin realises he resents his own brother, and subsequently regrets that he's betraying himself/undermining what he stands for, by feeling wrath at all. Just makes me really sad. And yes, these emotions perfectly precede his later actions as he avoids participating in the kinslayings.
I also like how Galadriel's current devotion to Feanor may play a part in causing her to go with the sons of Feanor to Arda. Is Beleriand in Arda? Your set up and foreshadowing of events is really good.
I'm so disappointed that this story is seemingly discontinued! You've done a beautiful job writing this story, especially Galadriel's very complex relationships, especially the ones with her uncles. I liked the letter from Fingolfin especially and how you differentiated between the three brothers.
You didn't succumb to the temptation to make her perfect, which was great; she came off as rather cold and almost ruthless, and it was interesting to see how she changed over the centuries. I also liked how Celeborn and Galadriel started out as friends, rather than a love interest; it seems like that's a bond that they'll always have. I'm a little disappointed that all the scenes are so brief, but it must be tricky trying to write centuries' worth of living in one story.
I have read the similiarion so I am wondering the relationship between galadriel and celeborn at the beginning taken from inferences?
jacqui 1/1/05 . chapter 15
i love this story. i think i read it for the first time about 6 months ago. i kept going back and reading parts of it again. it brings so much of a story into the history of the times mentioned. the noldor interest me greatly, perhaps because of their complex lives. so i have very much enjoyed reading this. a few weeks ago i was extremely happy to see it had been updated. i have just now gone back and read this chapter again. i can't wait for the next one to see how this all works out.
Never have I read a story that so explained the consequences of Feanor so well written as yours. Congratulations on the wonderful writing! This story is truly a masterpiece.
Wow! I'm so glad you're back with this. This was a fantastic chapter - you deal with all the complex politics of the First Age so well, without leaving anything or anyone out. It's amazing. Naturally, being me, the bits I love most are the Celeborn ones - you write him so well; thoughtful but masculine, and not willing to take any kind of s**t from her. From what I see of her here, she badly needs that kind of influence in her life!
I enjoyed the visit to Cirdan, and the strange relationship between Nimloth and Dior. But what a terrible place to leave it! (I mean terribly heartwrenching for the readers.) I will be waiting in extreme trepidation for the next chapter!
Oh, my! It was a long wait, but worth every minute of it! Your Celeborn is so complex, so impressive, so wonderful that he alone would make the whole tale worth reading.
But there's also your Galadriel. You bring me almost - almost! - liking her, several times, only to make me hate her dishonesty even more, after the next twist.
And then there is poor Orodreth, making the fatal mistake, just to be freed from the overwhelming shadow of Finrod, foreshadowing his own fall due to human influence, too. And I certainly can understand his wife. I wouldn't want to fill Galadriel's shoes, either.
Oh, and Círdan! Such strength! Such dignity! Such sober humility, realizing that he wasn't the right person to raise a future King, after all! And I'm very happy that there are still authors who go for the Ereinion son of Fingon solution. I thought I was the only one left. *g*
All in all, the story didn't lose its strong inner coherence and its charms during the long break. On the contrary, it seems to grow better and better with each new chapter. I'm very happy that you updated.
First, I would like to thank you for creating and sharing such a wonderful story. Really. I seldom read fanfictions as I prefer the originals for the canon and style. But this one is just perfect. I've spent almost all day reading through the chapters and, what can I say... You have blown my mind away. I've always been a huge Galadriel fan and this story fullfils all my dreams of untold events and fills so many gaps. I can see that you have crafted your work with much love in Tolkien's writting and have paid special interest and effort in details. I congratulate you for that. Because as I was reading the story and imagining every movement, expression, everything! I was even speaking the dialogues outloud! I cannot wait for the end (and I admit I don't want it ever to end). A really fantastic and wonderful story. Excellent job :)
This is a wonderful depiction of the relationship between Galadriel and Feanor. I confess I've always been intrigued by the lock-begging and how the two greatest of the Noldor were "unfriends" for ever. Also, I love Feanor, he's the best, and while I like Nerdanel/Feanor separation stories, a good Galadriel, Feanor story is sorely needed once in a while, even if it's not romance. I'll come back for the rest later, I'm slightly depressed that you killed off Feanor in 6 chapters.
Also, the idea of Feanor giving Galadriel the Elfstone is very new and interesting. I didn't somehow imagine the Vanyar as sturdy, I more thought that of the Noldor, since they were like Aule and were smiths, etc. (they'd need to be strong) I assumed Galadriel took after the Noldorin side, but was greater even than them. But all your other research is WoW! very thoroughly done, great job! You must have read silmarillion and home many times.
I also thought Galadriel very much like Feanor, so the fact that they both agree on the same wrong but necessary actions is unsurprising. Good job portraying it though!
I like the affair with Glorfindel! I wonder how they'll break it off! He's alive, isn't he?, in LotR, in Rivendell? And she's in Lorien, with her HUSBAND...hmm, Interesting...;)
Finally there happened something concrete between Artanis and Celeborn. yippee!
This is a great fic! Please update soon! I love the chapters for being so long! And the plot is so skillfully made and exciting. I think I have to read it all over again from the start while waiting for the next chapter. ;)
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