|Reviews for In The Wind And The Light|
| Gunlord500 11/26/12 . chapter 3
Alright, next chappo! If you wanna take a break, bro, that's okay, we understand...just come back to us someday :D That said, I enjoyed this chapter...cant say much more, cuz me be busy, but to respond to your authors notes:
1: Yeah, Malledus could get annoying, but FE3/11 did need a tactician character, so I cut him some slack...
2: In reference to the Tales of Abyss thing, don't be too discouraged. There aren't as many reviews or story views being given out these days, as I've told other folks. There are a variety of reasons for this, but long story short, things might pick up when FE13 comes out :D :D
Also, speaking of Fire Emblem in English, did you know FE12 got translated recently? Go to heroesofshadow dot net and check out the translation! My main men The End and VincentASM worked on it, they and their friends did a SUPER good job :D :D
| LordCooler 11/20/12 . chapter 1
Well it is very nicely laid out. You've separated the paragraphs and the talking well, but there are some cases where a sentence is left by itself when it didn't need to, for instance:
"Merric shook his head for the umpteenth time today. He really should cast the lithe mage from his mind. It wasn't helping him. An arrow that nearly caught him in the chest cemented that.
Merric heard someone shout, pointing to the sky. A lone pegasus knight was flying right towards him. He readied his Excalibur tome, winds whirling around him as he prepared to bloast the knight out of the sky."
That could be one paragraph. On the same note, see if you can find some other nouns or descriptions for characters, people start to get annoyed reading Merric over an over again, trust me D:
This is a good story though, you use a great vocabulary :D I don't want this to sound like a flame (REALLY DON'T! D: ), so don't take it that way!
| Gunlord500 11/19/12 . chapter 2
"Fane of Ramen"
Funny typo, my friend XD XD
Hmm...okay. Chris seems kind of Marty-Stuish here, with being able to outdo Merric in some respects, and helping Tiki break out of her reverie, and so on, but I guess thats fitting given MyUnit in the games. XD XD I have to ask, though, was that intentional? Cause if you were making fun of FE12 you did a good job XD XD
Hmm...the line about Garnef also sounds a bit weird. Of course Merric "wouldn't like" Garnef, everyone hates him because of his role in the last war.
Aside from that, there were some spelling/capitalization errors and stuff, but I don't wanna nitpick...sometimes folks get mad at meh if I do XD;; I liked the battle scene, and this chapter was fun too. Nice work :D
| noob7 11/19/12 . chapter 2
So you have Cain and Est as a couple in this? Interesting. I'll be looking forward to more
| Gunlord500 11/13/12 . chapter 1
Another brother writin' for Archanea! Always a good thing! Glad to see you 'round these parts, my friend :D
Hmm...okay, you said you don't have a beta, so I understand about the spelling errors and stuff. There aren't too many, but even so, might be cool to give the fic a little look-over before releasing it if ya don't have a beta...for instance, you misspelled "Aurelis" a couple times. Still, no biggie.
Aside from that, I liked this piece quite a bit! Not much stuff for Archanea, like I said, so it's always nice to see more for it. The Merric/Linde stuff was good, though I confess I'm not big on romance these days. That said, I would advise mentioning in author's notes and stuff what bits of canon you've changed specifically. For instance, will you be incorporating the War of Heroes in this fic, or will you be doing something completely different? I might do that sometime m'self, so that's why I'm asking...I don't wanna rip you off inadvertently XD But anyways, nuff about me...keep writing! You seem like a bro :D