Good so far! I wanna see a little more interaction between James and Alan... :-)

I LOVE IT! Update soon!

Not sure I want to continue reading this now.

A few errors here and there. Then Again we aren't all perfect. but Compy's in the first film, do not remember seeing them until the 3rd film.

Anyway I am having a hard time chosing which is better, your story or the film, but i am going with my gut and staying with the film.

Ouch! Bye-bye, Nathan.

Right. There were a few spelling mistakes. Grammar and Punctuation needs looking over too. Some paragraphs are a little big too, but you can work around them. Also, there is the point of when two different characters are speaking.

When two different characters are speaking you are supposed to put them on separate lines. The obvious one is when Tim, Lex, Alan and James are climbing the second tree. Tim complains about hating trees and Lex says that they don't bother her.

Lex's line should be on a different line.

I winced at a few parts where there were grammatical mistakes because I know that you can do better.

A final round of proof-reading wouldn't go amiss here.

Other than that - I enjoyed it.

Update again - SOON!

A long, but massive improvement to that of the last chapter. Give yourself a round of applause and breathe a sigh of relief.

I enjoyed the looks that Nathan was giving Kara, despite little convo being made.

And I liked the way you gave the dino's names. lol, I liked that.

Brilliant work.
SoulVirus

Again another massive improvement than before, and I see you still left in the sibling rivalry between Kara and James, I so love that.

Good work.
SoulVirus.

A much better improvment than that of before. See you have kept some scenes, like James suddenly being drunk at the very end here, love that part.

Anyway keeping this review short as i want to read on more.

Great improvment.
SoulVirus

"I can't see." noted Tim, climbing over his sister.
"Hey!" cried James. "Head! Your on mine! Move!"

("Your on mine!" That should be you're.)

Other than that... it was fine. Update next chapter soon.

Better...

Good.