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YouWILLbealright 3/12/13 . chapter 1Badass! |
Guest 2/3/13 . chapter 1 Need to apply ice to that burn? Lol |
gawesome11 11/15/12 . chapter 1Okay well this story was a little confusing. Wouldn't it be Teddy upset over the loser whatever and Spencer wouldn't? I think you need to go to a writing camp or something because you're not that good of a writer. I am not trying to be rude but it's true. The reason why no one reads your stories are- 1. The storylines aren't that interesting 2. Everyone knows about you and how you write short stories that aren't really good Some people are born with the talent of writing like me. And some people are like you they love writing but they can't get the hang of it. And they want to write well, think they write well, but they don't write well. Maybe you should get a beta reader to help you make better stories because you really could get all the help you could get. It isn't that the stories are all bad it's just you make Teddy a 17 year old girl talk like a 35 year old woman. You make the characters OOC a lot like in one story Gabr hit Charlie. Gabr would NEVER do that. Also Charlie is a 3 or 4 year old she's a toddler. And you made her take care of Toby in your story. If that happened Teddy would have not taken a picture of it but let Charlie help with whatever was going on. And Bob or Amy would have gotten to Tony first anyways. So this was major OOC. Another reason why people don't read what you write... OOC. Sure they read OOC stories but all of your stories are OOC. It's kind of annoying. I think you should take a break from for a while and try to figure out how you could write so everyone likes it. I do enjoy your stories sometimes but most times I just wish that you would figure out a new writing stragety. Here go on fanfiction's sister site I think it's fiction press and start from there. Write stories that you come up with so then you can make the characters however you want. I think that's a good start for you. After you do that and if you get good reviews come back here and write more if you don't then stay there and try to get some. Or just get a beta reader. |
andrew 11/14/12 . chapter 1 that was the stupidest piece of crap i've ever read. STOP WRITING FOR ALL THAT IS GOOD! you're not very good. |