|Reviews for The Surprise|
| Baker Alchemist Strawberry 1/20/13 . chapter 1
This was a lovely little one-shot. Gave me my daily dose of WAFF and I suspect it will again the next time I read it!
I can honestly see Vyse doing this as well.
| Blue Rogue Linds 11/21/12 . chapter 1
D'aww, this was so cute. I absolutely love the Vyse/Fina pairing, so reading this made me grin like an idiot. They were both very in character; this sounds like a scene straight out of the game. I also like how you repeated and italicized words and phrases that had special meaning.
There were a few errors, though. You repeated the word 'soft' too many times in the beginning. Maybe come up with other ways of describing the way Fina asks him where they're going, or find some synonyms that look decent in the sentences used. You also had a tense mix-up in the line where Vyse says, "It's a surprise." It should be: "It's a surprise," Vyse answered with a smile.
Other than that, this was an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. :)