More would sure be nice... puppy eyes

Would love to read more if you ever choose to continue it.

This'd be one of those teasing ones that give us a little looksie at what could be a very interesting longer story and just leaves us there isn't it? Other than that I like how you tied in the Neverwhere idea of Underworld and what not. Very intriguing. Just wished this wasn't open-nevermind-ish end. Jareth speak was quite well done.

Interesting

This was AWESOME! I enjoyed EVERY bit of this and would love to see more to this story, if not a sequel. This was very beautifully written and I LOVED the Un-day as well as that wonderful list. Please, more :D

I wouldn't really call this romance. But it was interesting.

Haha, damn, I want sparkly hot pants..

Congrats on finishing! It's so easy to start something, sometimes it's just so hard to finish. I rather like where this lead, and am sad to see this is where you intend to stop. But I'm also glad you didn't try to drag it out past where you could reasonably take it, too often a story gets extended and extended and it becomes a hot mess. I also like that it's so open ended, a lot of the time in a story half the fun is filling in the missing bits your own self.

I don't get the story yet. What does he mean when he tampered with "fate"? No one can control fate...right?

By the way I see the art now. You really do have him in some hot pants, but not feminine ones at least. More like men's boxers.

One of the darn funniest things I've read. I am still laughing. Giggling. That's not like me. Hot pants? On Jareth?He would ahve extremely skinny legs, like a chicken I am afraid. Are you really referring to the short shorts worn by women in the early seventies? Really. Hilarious. It would be better to have him in low slung ovely tight trews that are very sexy. It would seem more appropriate. This makes him sound like a corss dressing gay guy, and I do not think that is what you had in mind. It is still darn hilarious. Looking foward to the rest.