Reviews for Forbidden love
wolf8356 12/28/12 . chapter 10
Ok the begining and middle of this chapter was pretty shakey.
wolf8356 12/28/12 . chapter 9
Da fawq?
Dusk 'till Gone 12/25/12 . chapter 10
Just in my opinion I think the story is good and that you continue. You can't let yourself get discouraged.
L33TSoUL69 12/13/12 . chapter 10
im sorry this chapter took so long. I got a beta reader to check my story but her exams came in and i grew impatiant after the third day...not her falt. So i just uploaded it. I do realize the court system is very unrealistec but watevs its pokemon there rules are diffrent! XD I hope you injoyed the chapter. good day/night. :)
artur0407 12/13/12 . chapter 10
Ermahgerd this is so funny:
1) He is under 15 parents take all legal responsibility
2) He would be charged for "unreasonable self defense" or assault
3) His mom doesn't give a damn when she hears it on the phone
Ololol ty lawyer school.
derpenstine 12/5/12 . chapter 9
why would you end it like that...it just makes me want to read more!
L33TSoUL69 12/7/12 . chapter 9
i hope you guys liked the ninthed chapter. I recieved great feadback in PMs. Chapter 10 is current olmost done, all i have to do is proof read and have my co-worker check it for spelling and grammer. This should be done, at most in 5 days due to the weekend and me partying with ma bro's. People seem to not mind the aage skip so ill leave it be. Have a nice day/night :)
artur0407 12/5/12 . chapter 9
It's the ''grammer'' that kills it. Friggin' proofread this stuff, or use the MS word autocorrect or something. My brain stopped working halfway through, but you can still save this fic. I'll be lookin' towards the next chapter.
L33TSoUL69 12/3/12 . chapter 8
I think this is how i poste reviews for my readersXD Well first. im trying harder to make the story better, mutch harder. I understand i had a bunch of errors on chapter 6 and 7 and thats my bad. I am a new writer so i was naive. I thought the sooner i posted chapters the better...i was wrong, because i rushed way to mutch. Now i know other beginner writers are soooo mutch better than me...but im trying my hardest, If my hardest isnt enuff please LET ME KNOW. I'll keep re editing my chapters before i poste thim untill there perfect...even if it takes weeks! I thank you people who are following this story more than you think. If you like a chapter poste it. If you dont...poste that you dont but tell me why so i CAN get better, otherwise i'll suck FOREVER! I dont want that. Again thank you readers :) Im currently working on chapter nine. It should be done within 1-3 days from now. Again thanks and have a nice day/night! :)
Guest 11/30/12 . chapter 8
Jckxkckcjci lol dont mind it at all
derpenstine 11/26/12 . chapter 7
bad grammer but other than that good story ill be waiting for more!
derpenstine 11/26/12 . chapter 5
i love the ending!
derpenstine 11/26/12 . chapter 4
you could have spent more time on the battle scene...but it was still great
derpenstine 11/26/12 . chapter 3
wow its gotten good
derpenstine 11/26/12 . chapter 1
well good start. its to bad you copied your idea though.
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