|Reviews for It Started with a Whisper|
| A. Mulholland 3/10/13 . chapter 4
This was too, too great. I am squeeing internally at the adorable of it.
You are absolutely fantastic writer and storyteller. I can't wait to read more of your work.
| A. Mulholland 3/10/13 . chapter 2
"As they fall onto the bed, she's still thinking of everything she'd miss from home.
She realizes later that she never thought of how much she'd miss Adam."
Fantastic. There's so much meaning packed into just two sentences. What a powerful way to convey such a complicated state of mind and decision. Absolutely fantastic.
You do a fantastic (I apologize for the profusion of "fantastics" - I'm stuck on this word IRL and it seems to have transferred, especially since your work is, indeed, fantastic) job with the characters.
| Sidalee 1/16/13 . chapter 5
I re-read this whole story and I still love it to pieces. Especially this last chapter. I like the way you made them 'come out' to Chin and Danny, which was basically Danny being his usually over observant self and knowing way before everyone else. But hey, it was so damn funny with the puns on nearly every ship this fandom has. What a great and hilarious idea. Lol.
I loved all the little domestic little glimpes to their life together because I love domestic McKono the best.
Thank you for this story!
| tracysgate 1/5/13 . chapter 5
and finished with a squeal* the story that is. not McKono :)
| sellthelies 12/23/12 . chapter 5
I'm going to try and do this without reading again! Because that's what screws me up, I get to that bit with Grace at the end, and I'm just a mess again. So cute and perfect!
There's just so much I love about this final bit. Steve sleeping on her couch waiting for her, but not expecting to stay over. I love that so much.
The bit with Doris is so delightful too, of course she knows, but I love that you had her stay out of it. Not try and interfere, she knows her place. She loves Steve, but knows she really has no place talking to him about these things yet. I love that you were nice to her, I think she's going to be one of those characters that people aren't always because of personal feelings, which is understandable, but I really like when people don't do that.
And everyone findng out! Just so fabulous! I love the way you write Danny, and the team moments like that. Teasing, and cute, but not over-pushing things. And the "maybe I was talking about Chin", so cute! I really loved that. And how I'd love to read all these "rules" that Danny and Chin came up with. I'm going to pretend it's laminated and stuck on the break room wall.
The end is my favourite though! Grace! There really isn't enough Grace in Steve/Kono fic, and her reaction is so cute. I love it so much.
| hunnybee1 12/22/12 . chapter 5
Loved this! That final scene in particular, with them at the beach, was just so cute and I loved how they "came out" to Chin and Danny at HQ.
As for the one-shots you talked about - absolutely! I'm more than a little hooked on your McKono fics, so I'll be reading all of them. Keep up the good work!
| alekeneka 12/19/12 . chapter 5
I really enjoyed your story. Looking forward to reading more of your stories!
| tanya2byour21 12/18/12 . chapter 5
This chapter was to cute and I loved it. I can't wait to find out what is going to happen next. Keep up the great writing and please post more soon.
| TvFanatic97 12/15/12 . chapter 5
I liked the ending and I'm glad that you decided not to re-write it in the end! I'm sorry that my review has taken some time, I haven't had much time to properly sit on a laptop to write out my review but now I have time...I'm sad to see it end though. I know I've already said that I'm all for the Steve/Kono collection but I'll say it again, please do go ahead with the collection of one-shots!
I liked how guilty Kono felt that Steve had showed up with takeaway with plans to spend the night with her and she already had plans then she kept thinking about him throughout her time with her friends and just wanted to go back home to Steve...so cute! I loved the line about how nice it was for Kono to come home to someone especially because Kono decided to give their relationship a go because she didn't want to return to an empty house...it all works well together and flows; bravo!
I'm glad that you had their relationship "exposed" to Doris first (even if she already knew) because it was original and it made sense. It was really sweet to hear about all the different looks Steve has reserved for Kono and how he smiles more and has a special smile when she's around and I'm not surprised that someone noticed them and it was plausible for that someone to be Doris because she's admittedly very smart (she did put herself in hiding for like 20years). Their conversation was so incredibly sweet with some seriousness to it as well a perfect example of the mix of the two was Kono's declaration about how she doesn't want to see Steve hurt by Doris' presence. Also I think that if you go ahead with the established Steve/Kono one-shot collection you should do one with Steve and Kono having dinner with Doris at her new apartment.
You managed to come up with a fantastic but equally plausible and hilarious scenario for the team to find out about Steve and Kono, kudos to you! You wrote Danny perfectly (as per usual) with his teasing and his need to get Steve all riled up, it was hilarious. It's very in character that Steve tried to deflect from Danny's line of enquiry by teasing him but of course it didn't work and Danny just seized the opportunity to get Steve all worked up and jealous (which is great because I love seeing that side of Steve). I like how you brought in bits and pieces from previous episodes such as the undercover kiss and that psychic scene, I loved the original scenes and you just made them 10x better by using them in this context. I also liked how in "Scratch" it was Steve to reveal it first and now you've changed it up a bit and had Steve give that right to Kono...it's nice to see the change. Poor Chin having to listen to all this talk of Steve basically defiling his cousin and oh dear Kono just couldn't help herself with the supply closet...which was a very nice visual btw. I also loved the mention of the "boss" thing...I commend your great continuation in your fics! This whole scene just had me in fits of laughter, you make the beloved ohana scenes on the show even more entertaining!
At the beginning of this fic we saw the formation of a great friendship between Kono and Mary and it's nice to see how close they really are now. I don't have a brother myself but I can't even imagine how disturbing it is to think of your best friend having sex with your brother. I'm really glad that Mary has no problem with them being together though! I'm slightly curious about what it is Kono thinks Steve is very good at...but he must be very good at what he does if Kono describes it as being "ravaged".
I love how simply Steve just came out and asked to meet Kono's mom (well, parents really) because it's fitting to his character and you've also had him declare things so simply since he told her he wanted her. I just love how you write the simplicity of their relationship and Kono grabbing Steve's hand in the final scene was a great highlight of this. I loved how simple her realisation of how much Steve meant to her and the future she wanted to have with him was. Grace's reaction to them being together was so cute and I could picture her reacting that way easily.
This has been a great fic and thank you so much for sharing it with us all. I can't wait for any future works you may have in store for everyone!
| nacimynom 12/12/12 . chapter 5
I loved you story. In this chapter I especially enjoyed Kono's conversation with Mary (not being his sister I would have liked to know what Steve is very good at) and the last scene when Kono finally decides to openly stand and hold Steve's hand. I would be definitely interested in reading more of your Steve/Kono stories. How about when Steve goes to meet Kono's mom?
| MaursMill1 12/11/12 . chapter 5
"I'm thankful for you," he says, so simply and openly that her heart stops, and stutters, before it falls into his hands completely."...def my favourite line of chapter 4 AND the rest of it came in very close...so good :-)
"In that moment, she wants nothing more than to be with the trio, teasing Steve and Danny, or more like teasing Steve with Danny (or sometimes the other way around), and helping Grace moderate. She wants to eat with him and laugh with him, to sit with him and go home with him, to fall asleep and wake up the next morning in his arms. She wants to be on the receiving end of that special Steve McGarrett smile Doris said her son saves just for her." and this is my fave of the finale :-) Cuz i totally felt this myself...so very real and so very romantic. You wrote them so perfectly...it was like watching an episode of H5O!
Thank u and very well done :-) and yes please do continue with the short stories! The romance between them is so wonderful to read, since we're not getting it on the actual show :(
| fiveohlove 12/11/12 . chapter 5
Aww! The first scene was just so great. I love how she came home to him sleeping on her couch, and how she thought that it was nice to go home and have someone there waiting for her. The scene when Chin and Danny outed them was priceless! Totally how I see them reacting to their relationship; I can't see Danny outing them in any other way. And, Chin's reaction was perfect. I can't see him wanting to beat Steve up. It would just be too childish and Kono is an adult and can make her own decisions. Dating Steve is defo one of her good choices. I defo loved the phone conversation with Kono/Mary, too! I'd totally react the same way. I was laughing my ass off.
| christinaxa 12/11/12 . chapter 5
I'm so sad that it's the end of another amazing story from you, but you closed it out so well once again! I loved how after Steve showed up at her house, Kono felt kind of guilty for going out and tried to get home as soon as possible. I think it really said so much when Steve heads for the door but Kono steers him towards her bedroom instead, and he couldn't stop himself from smiling. Love how that one simple act really elevated their relationship. In the second scene when Doris talks to Kono, I really found myself wishing that this happened on screen! Especially with Doris' character.. I'm not a fan of what they're doing with her on the show, I feel like it's adding so much more angst onto Steve and he already has enough of that. So, I really appreciate how you wrote Doris in here. I love how she figured out Steve and Kono were together just based on his smiles.
I love love LOVE how you had Steve and Kono's relationship exposed. With Danny and Chin, its great that you had them already know (I mean, hello they are detectives, hehe) but was just waiting for one of them to break and start talking. Danny is absolutely hilarious and you write him so well, trying to trick them and knowing exactly how to get Steve riled up when he starts talking about the psychic's reading! I laughed when Chin is just sitting there all disgusted with the overshare of information on the looks and "activities" of the couple. "Don't look at each other like that when I'm around. Put that on the list, Danny." Serious, but playful Chin is always fun to read! I also wanted to say about the scene at the office: it's really awesome how you inserted the nods to previous episodes in different seasons, and linked them here without making them random and out of place. Kudos! I have to say, I think my favorite part of that scene was how Steve let Kono take the reigns on telling people about their relationship. If she was ready, then so was he, and it's so sweet that he respects her like that.
The scene with Mary Ann asking Kono if she's sleeping with someone to get over Adam is TOTALLY something I can see her doing. She's always been pretty quirky so it makes sense that she'd ask such a question instead of some boring "are you seeing anyone now?" haha. Poor Mary Ann though, she got her head filled with images that a sister does not need! I grinned so hard in the next scene when Kono goes back into bed with Steve, all free to stay and do whatever she wants now that Doris has moved out. ;-) Insecure Steve is so cute when he tells Kono he wants to meet her mom. Again, love how you linked that scene to one of Doris talking to Kono, as well as taking another step forward in their relationship. (Suggestion: maybe this can be a part of your one-shots collection?) Also, I am totally visualizing the "ravaging" Steve does to Kono, thanks for that ;-)
You know, I was pleasantly surprised that at the way Kono exposes her relationship with Steve at the HPD gathering. I really love how you wrote out her thoughts, about wanting to just walk over and just BE with Steve in any way possible. It was really so sweet. Loved Steve's reaction, shocked but definitely not wanting to pull away. I do think it's the possessive side of him coming up ;-) The way they "came out" (so to speak) was very true to their characters too, not over the top, but simple and to the point. Can't imagine it's easy doing so in front of most of HPD, especially since they're so well known amongst them, but the fact that they don't care about hiding their relationship anymore was so wonderful!
Well, I think I've rambled on long enough, but I honestly can't say thank you enough for coming up with such a wonderful piece! I am definitely looking forward to your one-shots collection! Cannot wait to read them and I know you'll have some really awesome ideas up your sleeve! :-)
| francis2 12/11/12 . chapter 5
Love this. They came out to everyone just like that, and it's okay. I especially love Kono's conversation with Mary.
| Lydia 12/10/12 . chapter 5
Beautiful! I totally loved it! Not only Danny and Chin find out/confirm but now the whole island knows they're together :) :happy sigh: I'm glad you didn't re-write the ending cause this was just perfect the way it ended. Your S/K friendship stories are wonderful but your S/K love stories make me swoon..
The first scene made me laugh. I've been loving the fact that Kono has her own friends to hang out with outside of work in your fics, but now I realize that that was before she had Steve as a boyfriend. Haha. Cause I wanted her to cancel her plans and stay home with him here. I mean how could she leave him to eat alone at her house and was he supposed to leave afterwards (:sad face:)? Anyway, everything turned out alright coz he had a quick thinking and fell asleep on purpose(?) on the couch ;D
That long scene with the team was just awesome! I like how Kono described Steve as someone who "keeps a low profile" and of course, Danny took off on that. As for how Danny and Chin found out? Haha, very careless of him.. I love how Danny had to keep apologizing to Kono.. Loved Danny, he was hilarious and in perfect character. Loved Chin too (poor guy, why did they have to kill his wife?).. Of course, I loved S and K and that goes without saying. Could they all get any cuter than this? I'd like to see what kind of ground rules they come up with for S and K to follow ;) I love Kono and Mary Ann's friendship (wish I could've seen more) and I like where her relationship with Doris is heading too. The ending... I'm glad she leaves her friends (you're making me eat my words) to be with him and bask in the glow of his special smile :D
What kind of question was that? Of course, I'd LOVE to read about Steve and Kono living together! Could I assume the oneshots would be sort of a continuation of this story? His mother moved out, so maybe Kono will move in? It doesn't really matter but I loved this story and don't want to let it go just yet. Anyway, I cannot wait to see what you'll come up with! Thank you for sharing your wonderful writing with us. Happy holidays and have a wonderful week :)