|Reviews for Parallel Universe|
| Dan50 5/11/13 . chapter 4
Oh boy Mihoshi...this should be interesting haha.
| Dan50 5/11/13 . chapter 1
Great first chapter. Grammar could use a touch up, but liking where this is going.
| Peter 5/9/13 . chapter 4
Good chapter. I like that you have written about the conflit that Tenchi has between Ayeka and Ryoko.
| manticore-gurl071134 5/8/13 . chapter 4
very interesting chapter. Great update :D
| KuroiRyoko 4/19/13 . chapter 3
I liked this story pls continue
| Peter 3/18/13 . chapter 3
Nice chapter. Just in some sections the flow is over sentances need some work, but all in all I like where this story is going
| anon 3/16/13 . chapter 3
hurray a new chapter, seems interesting so far keep it up.
| manticore-gurl071134 3/16/13 . chapter 3
lol. great chapter, the cliff hanger was pretty good too ;)
Oh well, can't wait to read what happens next.
| Yuuenchi 12/29/12 . chapter 1
I like the concept you're using, even without knowing how many other times it might have been done, though you might want to think about the name of your story: "Parallel Universe" is too functional and merely descriptive and doesn't sound like a name. Maybe something like "Another Chance" would be a better fit, depending on where you plan on taking the story.
Admittedly, your word choice could use a little cleanup here and there, but a sympathetic beta-reader could help you with that. At the same time I'm impressed that you're writing stories in two languages! I look forward to the improving of your skills!
The only other of concern I have for your story is in the pacing. To me, things are going too fast, with little connecting material. It's too much of a camera-eye view of things that leaves out a lot of story, actions are jerky, conversations seems stilted. the characters seem flat. (That could just be because you're assuming familiarity with the basic character, so I'll give that a pass for now ;) ).
All the same, I look forward to reading what comes next!
| manticore-gurl071134 12/23/12 . chapter 2
excellent update, can't wait to see what happens next! :)
| James Birdsong 12/22/12 . chapter 2
There is a lot of typos but other than that the chapter is good
| anon 11/29/12 . chapter 1
seems great so far please continue
| manticore-gurl071134 11/25/12 . chapter 1
ooooh that was interesting. Can't wait to read more.
| James Birdsong 11/24/12 . chapter 1
Excellent oh my yes excellent.
| Peter 11/21/12 . chapter 1
Thanks for a different take on Tenchi Muyo. Waiting next chapter