Oh boy Mihoshi...this should be interesting haha.

Great first chapter. Grammar could use a touch up, but liking where this is going.

Good chapter. I like that you have written about the conflit that Tenchi has between Ayeka and Ryoko.

very interesting chapter. Great update :D

I liked this story pls continue

Nice chapter. Just in some sections the flow is over sentances need some work, but all in all I like where this story is going

hurray a new chapter, seems interesting so far keep it up.

lol. great chapter, the cliff hanger was pretty good too ;)

Oh well, can't wait to read what happens next.

Greetings!

I like the concept you're using, even without knowing how many other times it might have been done, though you might want to think about the name of your story: "Parallel Universe" is too functional and merely descriptive and doesn't sound like a name. Maybe something like "Another Chance" would be a better fit, depending on where you plan on taking the story.

Admittedly, your word choice could use a little cleanup here and there, but a sympathetic beta-reader could help you with that. At the same time I'm impressed that you're writing stories in two languages! I look forward to the improving of your skills!

The only other of concern I have for your story is in the pacing. To me, things are going too fast, with little connecting material. It's too much of a camera-eye view of things that leaves out a lot of story, actions are jerky, conversations seems stilted. the characters seem flat. (That could just be because you're assuming familiarity with the basic character, so I'll give that a pass for now ;) ).

All the same, I look forward to reading what comes next!

excellent update, can't wait to see what happens next! :)

There is a lot of typos but other than that the chapter is good

seems great so far please continue

ooooh that was interesting. Can't wait to read more.

Excellent oh my yes excellent.

Thanks for a different take on Tenchi Muyo. Waiting next chapter