|Reviews for In The Past|
| Edhla 5/3/13 . chapter 1
I'm not familiar with canon so I can't comment on characterisation or your world-building, but I enjoyed this. Some of your descriptions are excellent, though there were a few sentences, particularly toward the end, that came out as slightly robotic/awkward-sounding. Thank you for writing x
| YellowWomanonthe 1/14/13 . chapter 2
Brink. Once more, unable to log in. :.(
Anyway, so far so good. I'm on a phone, so this review will be pretty short X(
Is it funny that when you were taking about electrical lines going up her body made me think about the little blue nanite lines from gen. Rex? :)
Wouldn't it be sensible if there was a lot of blood when his mother died? Nowadays, if women were to die in pregnancy, the process would be something along these lines:
1) Long, long labor. Like, really long. If a mother it's experiencing extreme pain she y request an epidural, which is really strong painkillers in your vag. Iflabor caries on for longer than 36 hours, there will be a cesarean section.
2) After intense labor pains (if there are any, and it doesn't have to be immediate) e expect a difficult birth- there may be complications.
3) Following that would be hemorrhaging, as in the mother is bleeding too much to stop, either from surgery or internal crap.
That's all, think.
| Kira Tsumi 1/12/13 . chapter 2
LOVVVVVVE IT! cant wait for more!
| Kira Tsumi 1/6/13 . chapter 1
please continue! i love this story!