|Reviews for Horseshoes and Hand-grenades|
| Galvantula866 5/20/13 . chapter 26
I was waiting for this chapter and it did not disappoint!
First off the new Void States has an interesting power if I'm reading this correctly: he can draw on an enemy's power and return it like a counter move of sorts. Gen is hellbent on getting King Ouroboros back and he may very well have the power to do so! Speaking of dark upgrades poor Yuki has started her turn as Gemini. There are valid sides to this that I want to share with you.
1: Yuki never really got a chance to shine in battle and this is the perfect chance for her to strut her stuff! Wartime causes us to reach inside and find sides of ourselves we didn't know we have and a monster jester is bound to cause trouble for the serpents.
2: Now that Yuki has given up her humanity for the power to fight back I'd like for you to have her re-look her views on space and what her future holds for her now that there's a very real risk of her crumbling to stardust should she overuse her power. I doubt she'll give up on space completely, but after losing friend after friend to space borne madness her viewpoint must have some jade in it.
Also I'm glad that Kou lost his Switch and Haruka gets to be Super Climax! It's a royal pity that we don't have a female lead Rider yet, but it's stories like this that make for a great start! I'm starting to feel worried about Shun's state of mind now that you revealed Ura is needed to keep him under check. At least Yuri's back to normal somewhat, so things are looking up.
Of course you did promise things are going to go south soon, so I'll be sure to check up on the latest updates when there are available.
| Yami no Paladin 5/19/13 . chapter 26
One word sums up my feelings for this review: What? Some things just fly WAY over my head here, and some things just don't fit in continuity.
First would be Shun's relationship with Vasuki. I'm sorry, but I think I got a little lost about how they operate. So did Vasuki make Shun his Serpent-Bearer WAY before (like when Shun had to stay drinking loads of milk for an antidote) or was Vasuki just staying in his body then?
Next would be Haruka's transformation into Den-O Super Climax Form. You seem to be going a bit overboard with the convenience of Den-O's powers here. It's like you're tossing about the Imagin and out of absolutely nowhere Haruka's a Singularity Point that can handle all five Imagin without a belt, or the K-Taros? I just gotta say…really now?
Yuki's also being kinda wacky in the head here. She was fighting alright in the previous chapters, though she was really depressed from the loss of Gentaro and Kengo, but here she suddenly gets into semi-Heroic BSOD and decides to become a Zodiarts because she's "stayed in the sidelines for too long". I mean, having Gemini get in on this is great, but Yuki's transformation and her reasons for pressing the Switch is kinda…weird.
Lastly, Meteor's fight with Fourze Void States (which, by the way, sounds totally awesome! The snake theme followed to a T and a reversal of the white and black in the Base States. It's a Negative Fourze!). Meteor's definitely a brainwashed android of Virgo's here, right? Coz it seems like Ryusei, for some weird unknown reason, reverted back to the good guy he was right before the mess happened. I quote these lines from the story:
"The only thing he did know was that he wasn't going to go down without a fight. He had a job to do: defeat Fourze and put an end to this madness once and for all. He'd either accomplish it or die trying."
See? Good guy lines. I think you fell into a tendency to have a clear cut good guy and bad guy here, but that's not good for this scene. Makes readers like me confused. What happened? It was working out ok in the last chapter Meteor was in
And so, I'll end the review with a score I never thought I'd give you: 4/10. I'm sorry for this, but in really disappointed with this chapter. Too many holes and irregularities that didn't match up with your previous chapters or expansion spin-offs. But I hope you'll pick up and continue working hard with this story!
| Galvantula866 4/22/13 . chapter 25
It still amazes me that we're now on the third intermission AND the 25th chapter! It looks like Yayoi, Mei and KR Wizard have met up and things have gotten stranger still.
First off Wizard's need to help people out is a noble goal but there are times where it's best to turn the other cheek and go on your way. Renenutet was bribed by Ophiuchus and I do have to wonder why so many serpents are on Ophi's side. Tarot Pick-Up reminds me of Yu-Gi-Oh duels and you have a good understanding of Haruto's character and the powers he has during this early point in his career. His death defending Yayoi is fitting for him, the man who will fight on no matter what taken down by the swords of destiny.
Damballa is known as a protector of the disabled, so I gotta ask if he believes having Dragon in him counts as one.. It was nice of him to bring Haruto back, but I doubt being a sand doll is much better than being dead. Nice callback to the live action Where The Wild Things Are movie; for something marketed to kids it was rather dark and violent. Still it was nice to see Mr. Perfect Haruto taken down a peg, even if he's now under Dam's thrall.
Mei is a wild card, stopping Wizard from helping out and then giving Yayoi a card to get her to Futo. Having her help out will make her story and MOS interesting to read.
Oh yeah, Meteor Impact VS Void States is up next! What will fate hand to everyone taking part of this battle once this Saturday is said and done; I will only find out once I read the next chapter.
| Dragon and Sword Master 4/21/13 . chapter 25
interesting way to introduce Haruto/Wizard and I am quite curious as to what will happen next with him...
| Dragon and Sword Master 4/18/13 . chapter 24
So many good things, so many bad...how is it possible for you to continuously write such a good story?
| Matsukaze Tenma 4/17/13 . chapter 24
thank you for updating; hope to read the next chapter soon
| Galvantula866 4/16/13 . chapter 24
What was it about "One step forward, two steps back"? It looks like Yuri is back to being human, but as for being normal? Ritsuko may have to spell out to her that she was blinded by revenge and anger. Will that even be enough to save her soul or is that too much to ask of the former snake of water? Now there's two new snakes on the scene and they have Yuki! Just what are they planning to do with her anyway? Turn her into Gemini or something else?
I felt bad for Riderman when all of his gear was slagged. He was never the strongest Rider, but his "Arms" had allowed him to overcome incredible odds. It's sad to see both Riderman lose his weapons and the Clear Drill getting crushed to give Riderman an edge. At least Amazon is still his friend and has a new Super Move to boot!
Meteor Impact just can't catch a break, now can he? He finally kicked Fourze's ass but all it did was bring the new Void Switch into play. Life just hates our heroes here, doesn't it? Just what happened to turn the snakes against humanity like this?
It looks like we're winding down on the Kyoto arc, but it seems you saved the best for last. What will happen to the KRC? Will Ryusei be able to survive his battle? There's a lot to bring me back here, as this continues to prove itself to be one of my favorite stories on here.
| B-36 4/12/13 . chapter 23
IS it fair to ask if Gentaro is going to die a horrible and excruciating death?
| Galvantula866 3/30/13 . chapter 23
Sarina is just not a nice person, but hearing about what happened to Libra was just brutal. Even if she's an evil Horoscope I kinda feel bad for her since she was brought back to Earth to hear about the death of the one man she cared about more than anyone. Onto that train of thought I'm liking the little tidbits about the snakes that are the lynchpin f the overall story.
I do want to address that drugging an enemy to spill their guts does seem to me that our heroes aren't being so heroic anymore. I know you're sick of hearing about that inverted Justice reading, but I believe that in desperation the KRC 2.0 has become willing to cross lines that Gentaro would have never allowed when he was alive. Nadeshiko taking Cancer's soul, while a fitting punishment could be foreshadowing that she's willing to cross lines even some of the Horoscopes wouldn't dare too. She's certainly one to keep an eye on, that's for sure.
Riderman is a total badass, charging into battle just to make sure Amazon is safe. That's real friendship right there and Ol' Libra is in a world of pain now that Amazon's gotten more power via his backfiring plan.
The Den-Os aren't doing so well against Leo and Fourze is on his way to gaining a DARKER STATE of being. Cakeboss and his odd help are going to be needed more than ever if Earth is to survive the coming of the King of Serpents.
A short, but entertaining chapter. Leo's parts were a tad dry, however everyone else was fun to read about and each of them was in character. 24 promises to be dark and fun, that's for certain.
| Yami no Paladin 3/30/13 . chapter 23
Ohsugi continues to be awesome here with his snappy retorts to Sonoda. One thing though, what's with the sudden "bug planted on enemy" thing popping out? Or did I miss the portion where it was planted on Hayami? Anyways, Ohsugi's quickly becoming my favorite character in this story.
Naomi forcing the coffee down Sonoda's throat, then happily saying that the coffee was drugged, just as Sonoda suspected, had me laughing hard. But WASABI in coffee?! I like wasabi, but having it in any drink of any kind is just gross.
I realized that you love pitting regular humans against supernatural humans/monsters. Now we have Haruka against Leo! Honestly, I didn't really like how she was using a sword instead of her kickboxing, which I really liked in her appearance in the series. But I guess fisticuffs aren't gonna cut it when you're fighting constellation monsters, huh?
I was expecting some evil deal between Nadeshiko and Kijima when you mentioned "a deal he can't refuse", but this had me laughing a little. Kijima was impaled upon his own sword here with HIS souls being taken instead of him taking Nadeshiko's. Nadeshiko's also being a great character here, with amazingly effective use of her SOLU powers. So can we assume she's gonna be using more of her transmutation powers in future?
And we start off another battle, this one between Riderman and Libra. I really would like to see how this battle works out.
The Taros' fight with Virgo was amazing to see, and it's refreshing to see Ryutaros being the mature one and making a smart decision while JK panics. So who does Ryutaros attack? I can't wait!
Kougami's friends with the Owner? Can't say I'm surprised. They're both weird and knowledgable enough to be friends. I'd like to see their interactions in future chapters!
10/10 for this chapter!
| Yami no Paladin 3/22/13 . chapter 22
The battle between Fourze and Meteor's intense, but thing is, I can't decide who to root for coz I can't decide who's the bad guy here! Ah well, I'll just support both of them!
Yuri's fight with the girls was just brutal. Yuki hit the Would Hit a Child stage when she burned Hana, but now JUGGLING people with boiling hot geysers?! Ouch…
Miu's great leadership once again comes into play with this battle. I missed that Chairperson of the KRC! Now to see her plan…
Amazon's fight was awesome yet scary at the same time. The Cosmic Energy that changed Amazon's suit? Anyone seeing Spider-Man here?
And this quote's the killer here: ""Thank you, Amazon!" The boy answered, a smile on his face. "Thank you for being a complete idiot!"" Nice way to get thanks, even if the kid was an evil teen-serpent in disguise.
The little point about Ophiuchus reviving the dead was a nice touch and attempt to get a moral dilemma going, but luckily for us, Amazon's smart! Though his new suit makes me worry for his allegiance after the battle…
Finally, we get Philip! Creepy, smart and loyal? Evil servant No. 1! Ophiuchus sent him to test Kengo? Is he just suspicious naturally or is he not fully in control of Libra yet?
10/10 for your great action scenes!
| Edhla 3/21/13 . chapter 18
"Coffee and its bitterness represent the trials of friendship!" - I have to tell you, and I have to be really honest. If you're really not up for something fairly blunt, skip the next paragraph:
I burst out laughing when I read this. This is what I was recently talking about in reviewing (I think) Birthday Massacre- perhaps he does or doesn't talk like this in canon, and to be honest, I have no idea whether I'm *supposed* to be laughing at him or not. Gentaro makes a lot of proclamations like this, and it more or less makes him come across as, well, an overenthusiastic simpleton.
There were some very nice moments in the ensuing action scene, with only one real complaint (aside from "a white fist punched in the gut"- I think you accidentally a word). And that is that it's not long enough :) What happens *in* the scene is excellent, but there are some crucial details missing. Like, what's wrong with Philip? He's on the ground and sweating profusely one second, and in the next, Shotaro honestly believes he's dying, and Reader Me is left wondering what on earth is going on, because the middle-details are missing.
The images of the "arcane" symbols being scratched into Shotaro's face are excellent, by the way, though as with the plotting, I'm now *really* confused about where your focus is supposed to be. That said, I really appreciated "Philip is gone..." because that *did* help clarify a few things.
"A nail-filled grin." Excellent, wonderful imagery. X
| Guest 3/17/13 . chapter 22
Thank you for the update...I sure hope they all get Gentarou back; please update soon
| Dragon and Sword Master 3/15/13 . chapter 22
I'm actually surprised that Amazon was able to absorb the Cosmic energy and use that to evolve into a higher power. Hopefully he'll use that power again...speaking of which, what has happened to the Kamen Rider W/Double crew...
| Galvantula866 3/15/13 . chapter 22
First off if I said anything to upset you I'm sorry. While the scene I mentioned is canon it's also way too dark to be laughed at.
Onto the meat of the review, I see the origin of the Meteor Impact Switch. As one reviewer said nunchakus fit Ryusei quite well and how these new gizmos will use the MI Switch remains to be seen. Although I'm still wondering if Emoto has really jumped ship and is now serving Gamou 100%.
What Yuri did to Yuki was brutal. Juggling someone with a boiling water geyser is savage and making it worse is the fact that she's pissed over Tomoko ditching the Lunar Witches. I don't know what kind of plan Miu has, but Yuri has to be stopped before she hurts anyone else. Thank goodness for Erin's healing powers or this scene would have been far worse that it is.
So Amazon gained a power up form that makes him more violent than before? He's going to need it since Apep and Libra are playing dirty pool, attacking him with cowardly attacks while trying to get the kids on their side. Plus these two do not respect the dead anymore than they do the living and Phil comes in just when things are looking there darkest. Sheesh, you sure do love bringing things down to the wire. That's going to make waiting to see how this mess with end all the harder, but I can wait.