I really like it! I hope you continue! Though, I think your sentences should be more natural than choppy. Other than that, nothing else should be fixed.

OMG I LOVE this story so far. It sounds like that 8 year old is going to have a better life than with his biological parents. And Chatterbeast seems to already take a liking to him because he hasn't ripped him to shreds and stayed by his side when the boy fell asleep

your story is great