|Reviews for What If|
| nightsentinel09 1/23/13 . chapter 3
I just read chapter 1-3.
First thing first, good job.
This fic has many intriguing and delicious ideas and I like the recreation you did with canon ...though the chapters were so criminally short that some of it lacked impact. Drabble form just ain't cutting it. This fic deserves a full fledged story .
But, judging from your AN you might not have time to write a multi-chapter fic...sigh.
So aside from writing more... Maybe you should go out of the canon rail for a while, I think Teru and Saki getting along in itself will probably cause a lot of story changes ... so you might want to verge from the original story if only a little bit more than what you are doing ...
Anyway, keep writing. :D
| Evil Detective 12/10/12 . chapter 2
Mmmm, slightly confusing.
Also, uh, too bad Mihoko didn't make it on the first chapter (I forgot to add this tidbits) - it's also implied even if Mihoko lost the 'bucchou - well, technically Yumi isn't -' battle, she's still pass, so...
I wonder if Teru is also bringing pudding and cakes (see Saki Biyori BG)
Thank for the story!
| Evil Detective 12/10/12 . chapter 1
On the 1st, I think the condition of the whole rule thing is if their school win ... they didn't win... yet, so...
'Too bad we can't play much after our schools win the perfecturals because of the rules'
Also, Awai/Sumire pls. :D
The fact that Miyanagas can't swim (or act like they can't?) is slightly scared me...
| rinshan kaihou 12/9/12 . chapter 1
One-san? You mean onee-san right? Cause I actually read that as 1-san. This fic is something i find to be very safe and although it sounds good I am not praising it. Why? Exactly because it's too safe. It doesn't feel like you're putting in new ideas than what others already have. I would like to see something unique next time.
| fansgirl 11/22/12 . chapter 1
interesting but too short, more please
| Ksakep 11/21/12 . chapter 1
Interesting idea. But quality...isn't ideal. Also, it's very short.