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Cat on a Shtick
2009-07-02 . chapter 3
You have the most elequent way of foreshadowing, lmao. 'I wouldn't be suprised if you came home bearing the child of an alien princess.', if i remember right.
You should really only watch out for minor plot gaps, though they may be intentional or maybe not, I can't tell. Things like what did Akane do to Ranma under the influence of the 'fetish demon', and similar things, as all thats clear is Akane having Ranma desperate for her affection. Was Ranma made into a demonic slave like Kodachi, or was it some other fetish impossed on Ranma. Also, how is Ranma's male ego coping with the experience happening and effecting his/her female self and not the male?
Small stuff mainly, but little details can make or break the draw your creating with your posibilities and foreshadowing.
I must say though I enjoy this story and hope you take to updating it more frequently.
borg rabbit
2009-03-31 . chapter 3
Pretty good for a long dead story.
Tigger-69
2008-02-27 . chapter 3
A fun and differnet story, I look forward to seeing how things pan out for all the Girls involved. This is a very interesting cross over of the various anime, very well discribed while leaving enough for my imagination to take it further and still come back for more.

Please continue
Dumbledork
2007-03-20 . chapter 3
Tis is quite a fun story. I hope you'll get your muse back and continue writing it one day.
a
2006-10-30 . chapter 1
He might have stopped writing all together. Stuff happens ya know?
Trscroggs
2006-05-16 . chapter 3
I know this story isn't likely to be continued. Seeing as how its had no changes in the last three years, but I wish it would be. I've always enjoyed this particualr type of story, even if you make fun of several Ranma-ficiton overused story elements (I KNOW there is one word taht means that, I just can't spell it.) of course screwed your formating to hell, but that's so typical you pratcialy have to write for to get it right, and even then it could go wrong.

I really do like the "Ranma related to everything at once" joke though.
Zero-Vision
2006-02-19 . chapter 3
is this story still being continued?
Innortal
2005-08-17 . chapter 3
Great job. This story was entertaining, as well as drew me in. I look forward to hoping that you continue it as well as your other Ranma/Nabiki stories.

Innortal
Atilla
2005-08-10 . chapter 3
It has potential with an interesting plot staying in a bar. Though the vague references to bringing in unsespecting drunk girls are a little heavy.
mdizzle
2005-02-19 . chapter 1
slasher!!
Sebastian Foxcraft
2004-10-18 . chapter 1
Good writer, let's just hope he continues some of the threads when he comes back.
Lanara Bolina
2004-03-26 . chapter 3
very good story. i hope you update soon. and why does ranma have green hair?
darkwoofe
2003-09-09 . chapter 3
I enjoyed reading this. I really hope you haven't given up on it.

darkwoofe
dogbertcarroll
2003-07-26 . chapter 3
The formatting is a bit cramped but I like
the story. It's been a year since it was updated
so I guess it's just another dead fic now.
dogbertcarroll
2003-07-26 . chapter 2
Hm. That really does suit Akane.
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