Sounds like a two year old wrote this

a good start..cant wait to know what will happen..
although the spelling errors could be looked into...

Personally I would keep it as third person or as a first person story. Reading this got me confused because you were jumping from character to character. I would also put more of a plot of why he wants her. Like for example; he is using her as leverage for revenge. so he has to keep her with him and alive. Or say he needs her as bait for something. or that someone visited him at the hospital and threatened her and now he has to go and save her so by taking her out of town is his way of saving her.

I wanna know what's going to happen next.

Keep updating